Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (say “around the neighbourhood” or “around the neighbourhood with my friends”) and avoid awkward phrasing like “visit”.

예시: Yes, I did. I rode a small red bike around the neighbourhood with my friends, and we often raced each other after school. Because it was close to home, I rode almost every day and it was one of my favourite ways to spend time.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence then support it with one clear reason and a brief example using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea; be specific about why your city relies on bikes (e.g. infrastructure, culture, traffic).

예시: Not really popular nationwide, but they are common in my city because we have many bike lanes and short distances between places. For example, most people cycle to work or school when the weather is good, so bikes are an important part of daily life here.

× I used to ride around at the neighborhood visit with my friends and I had a lot of fun with it.

✓ I used to ride around the neighborhood with my friends and I had a lot of fun.

The phrase 'ride around at the neighborhood visit' is ungrammatical. 'Ride around' should be followed by the place without 'visit'; use 'the neighborhood'. Also 'with it' is unnecessary after 'had a lot of fun' and should be omitted for natural expression. Suggestion: say 'ride around the neighborhood' and remove 'with it' to make the sentence clear and idiomatic.

× They're not exactly popular in my country, but they're popular in my city because my city relies on bikes more than other cities in my country.

✓ Bikes are not exactly popular in my country, but they are popular in my city because my city relies on bikes more than other cities do.

The original uses 'they're' which is vague and slightly awkward at the start; explicitly using 'Bikes' clarifies the subject. Also the comparative clause 'more than other cities in my country' needs a verb at the end ('do') to complete the comparison. Suggestion: start with the explicit subject 'Bikes' and add 'do' to the comparative clause for correct subject-verb agreement and clearer meaning.