Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence and naturalness by starting with a direct topic sentence, reducing redundancy, and varying vocabulary. Keep sentences concise (max 5) and use a linking word when adding the example. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., “neighbourhood” or tense consistency).

예시: Yes — I had a small bike with training wheels when I was a child. I often rode it to the park with my friends after school, and we would usually cycle around the neighbourhood for about an hour. Because it was easy to handle, it helped me build confidence before moving on to a larger bike.

제안: The response has relevant ideas but is unclear and contains grammatical errors and incoherent phrases. Improve by giving a direct answer first, organizing reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'), using specific examples, and fixing grammar and word choice. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid fragments.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in many parts of my country. They are especially common in cities and small towns because they are cheap, convenient and often faster than walking in heavy traffic. For example, many students ride bikes to school and commuters use them for short trips to work.

× Well yes I had a small bike when I was a child.

✓ Well, yes, I had a small bike when I was a child.

Missing commas around the interjection 'Well yes' are punctuation rather than grammar, but keep sentence; past tense is correct. Suggest adding commas for clarity: 'Well, yes, I had...'. Also ensure spacing after commas.

× It was a simple one with training wheels and I used it to go to the park and ride with my friends after school.

✓ It was a simple one with training wheels, and I used it to go to the park and ride bikes with my friends after school.

The original sentence mixes ideas and is slightly unclear. Add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses (sentence structure). Also clarify 'ride' by specifying what was ridden: 'ride bikes'. Suggest keeping parallel structure and punctuation: 'It was a simple one with training wheels, and I used it to go to the park and ride bikes with my friends after school.'

× For example, every weekend we would cycle around the neighbourhood for an hour or so.

✓ For example, every weekend we would cycle around the neighbourhood for an hour or so.

This sentence correctly uses 'would' to describe a habitual past action, so no grammatical change required. Keep as is. Suggestion: 'would' is appropriate for repeated past habits.

× Where I think bikes are quite popular in some part of my country.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in some parts of my country.

Original begins with misplaced 'Where', causing a sentence fragment and incorrect sentence structure. Remove 'Where' and change 'part' to plural 'parts' to match meaning. Use present simple 'I think' for general opinion.

× Many people use them in cities water town because they are cheap and convenient and it is faster than walking in traffic and students of fun ride bikes to my school

✓ Many people use them in cities and small towns because they are cheap and convenient, and they are faster than walking in traffic. Students often ride bikes to my school.

This long original sentence has multiple errors: 'water town' is incorrect—likely 'and small towns' (preposition/word choice). Run-on sentence needs splitting (sentence structure) and pronoun/verb agreement fixes. Replace 'it is faster' with 'they are faster' to agree with plural 'bikes' (subject-verb agreement). Change 'students of fun' to 'students often' (word choice). Break into two sentences for clarity and correct prepositions: 'in cities and small towns' and 'Students often ride bikes to my school.'