Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers like “umm,” and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say when you had the bike, why it was difficult (e.g. balance or fear), and what happened afterwards. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was about eight years old, but I never learned to ride it because I struggled to keep my balance. As a result, I felt discouraged and eventually stopped trying, although I still remember watching other children ride confidently.

제안: Give a direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and examples, and use linking words for coherence. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Mention types of bikes, reasons for popularity (convenience, cost, environment), and a brief result or opinion.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in China, particularly shared bikes that people can rent with an app. They are popular because they are cheap, convenient for short trips, and reduce traffic congestion, so many city residents use them every day.

× Yes, I had a umm, bike when I was a child, but I didn't learn it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I never learned to ride it.

The original sentence uses 'didn't learn it', which is unidiomatic for acquiring the skill of riding a bike. Use the verb phrase 'learned to ride' to indicate acquiring the ability. Also remove filler 'umm' for clarity. Keep past tense consistent ('had' and 'learned'). Suggestion: use 'never learned to ride' to clearly express you did not acquire the skill.

× It was tough for me, so I gave it up.

✓ It was too difficult for me, so I gave up trying.

'Gave it up' is vague; when referring to abandoning the effort to learn a skill, 'gave up trying' is clearer. Also 'tough' is informal; 'too difficult' fits better. Maintain past tense. Suggestion: use more precise verbs and collocations like 'gave up trying' or 'stopped trying'.

× Yeah, I think it is very popular in China, especially some some bicycle that are shared to everyone.

✓ Yeah, I think they are very popular in China, especially shared bicycles that are available to everyone.

The subject 'bikes' or 'bicycles' is plural, so the pronoun and verb should be plural ('they are'). The original uses 'it is' which is singular and incorrect for plural 'bikes'. Also 'some some bicycle that are shared to everyone' has repetition and wrong noun number and preposition. Use 'shared bicycles' and 'available to everyone' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs/pronouns and use correct prepositions ('available to' instead of 'shared to').

× So I think it's really

✓ So I think they're really popular and convenient.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Complete the idea by specifying what 'really' modifies (e.g., 'popular and convenient'). Also ensure pronoun agrees with 'bicycles' by using 'they're'. Suggestion: finish incomplete sentences with the intended adjective or clause to convey a complete thought.