Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and complete your sentences; include a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and finish ideas. Also use varied vocabulary (e.g., "cycling" instead of repeating "bike") and correct small grammar slips (e.g., "modal" → "mode").

예시: Yes, I did. My father taught me to ride when I was six, and I used to cycle around my neighborhood and occasionally to school. After moving to Bombay, I rediscovered my passion for cycling because several of my friends enjoy long rides, so we often go out together at weekends.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence then add two specific reasons with linking words. Fix repetition and word choice (use "mode of transport"). Complete the final thought and add an example or comparison to strengthen your answer. Keep answers within 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in India. They are an affordable and convenient mode of transport, especially in crowded cities where parking is difficult. Moreover, cycling is healthy and environmentally friendly, so many people choose bikes for short commutes or market trips.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was growing up.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was growing up.

In simple past narrative, using 'did have' is unnecessary emphasis and sounds awkward here. Use the simple past 'had' to describe a past possession. Suggestion: use simple past for habitual or past facts (I had a bike).

× My dad taught me how to ride a bike and ever since I've not forgotten how to ride one.

✓ My dad taught me how to ride a bike and ever since I have not forgotten how to ride one.

The contraction 'I've' is acceptable but the negative word order 'I've not forgotten' is formal; more natural is 'I haven't forgotten'. The main issue is tense consistency: 'taught' (past) followed by present perfect 'I haven't forgotten' is acceptable to link past event to present ability. Suggestion: use 'I haven't forgotten' for natural spoken English.

× While growing up we used to ride the bike around the neighborhood I used to stay in and sometimes take it to school also after moving to Bombay we've again picked up the passion of riding a cycle because my friends are also

✓ While growing up, we used to ride the bike around the neighborhood I lived in, and sometimes I took it to school. After moving to Bombay, we've picked up the passion for cycling again because my friends also do.

The original is a run-on sentence with missing punctuation and awkward phrasing. Corrections: add commas, change 'I used to stay in' to 'I lived in' (natural past expression), split into two sentences for clarity, change 'take it to school also' to 'I took it to school', and complete the final clause by adding 'do'. Also 'pick up the passion of riding a cycle' is unnatural; 'pick up the passion for cycling' is idiomatic. Use consistent tense: past for childhood habits, present perfect for recent change.

× I think that's the most convenient and also the cheapest mode of transport if I put it like that.

✓ I think that's the most convenient and also the cheapest mode of transport, so to speak.

The phrase 'if I put it like that' is informal but acceptable; however the sentence flows better with 'so to speak' or simply remove the clause. Also add a comma before the tag. Suggestion: keep or replace the tag phrase for natural spoken English.

× Irrespective of the city that I have stayed in India, almost every town be New Delhi or now Bombay you would find cyclists around you.

✓ Irrespective of the city I have lived in in India, whether New Delhi or now Bombay, you can find cyclists around you.

Problems: awkward word order and incorrect use of 'be'. Use 'lived in' instead of 'have stayed in' for habitual residence, and include 'whether' to introduce examples. Replace 'would find' with 'can find' for general truth. Remove extra 'in'.

× It's a convenient modal transport and also a great way to

✓ It's a convenient mode of transport and also a great way to get around.

'Modal transport' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'mode of transport'. The sentence was incomplete; finish with a phrase such as 'get around'. Suggestion: use 'mode of transport' and complete the sentence for clarity.