Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid contradictions (you said you had a bike but then said you had skateboards instead). Clarify whether you owned a bike or only a skateboard, and give a concrete example or memory. Keep to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I often preferred riding my skateboard. For example, every afternoon I went to the park with friends and we practiced tricks on the path. Because of that, I used the skateboard more frequently than the bike.

제안: Give a clear opinion sentence then support it with specific reasons and a comparison using linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “bike lanes” or “cycling paths” instead of “just route”) and avoid vague phrases. Limit to 3–4 sentences and include one concrete example or fact about local infrastructure or culture.

예시: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because there are few dedicated bike lanes. Instead, cities mainly have pedestrian or jogging paths, so people prefer walking or running. For instance, in my city the riverside park has a wide jogging path but no marked cycle lane, which discourages cyclists.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child because I think I had skateboards instead of bikes and I was really happy with them because every day I went to the park and I was playing with them.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I think I used skateboards more than bikes, and I was really happy with them because every day I went to the park and played with them.

The original sentence uses 'did have' unnecessarily; simple past 'had' is more natural. 'I think I had skateboards instead of bikes' is awkward for habitual past preference; 'I used skateboards more than bikes' clarifies meaning. 'I was playing with them' should be simple past 'played' to match the sequence of past events and avoid mixing past continuous with habitual action. Combine and punctuate clauses to improve clarity.

× I don't think so, because in my country we don't have any public just route for bikes.

✓ I don't think so, because in my country we don't have any dedicated public bike routes.

The phrase 'public just route for bikes' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'dedicated public bike routes' to convey the intended meaning. Also keep present simple 'don't have' to match the general statement about the country.

× So we have a lot of routes for just running.

✓ So we have a lot of routes for running only.

The placement of 'just' is incorrect. In English, adverb 'only' or 'just' should be placed close to the word it modifies. 'Routes for running only' or 'routes just for running' are correct. This fixes word order and meaning.

× You can walk, run, jog, but you can use bikes as usual as you can in the Europe.

✓ You can walk, run, or jog, but you cannot use bikes as easily as you can in Europe.

The original repeats 'can' awkwardly and uses incorrect comparative structure 'as usual as you can in the Europe.' Use the negative 'cannot' to contrast, 'as easily as' to form a correct comparison, and remove the article before 'Europe.' Also use commas and 'or' for list clarity.