Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two linked supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh) and reduce repetition. Use linking words (because, so) to connect reasons and finish within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. I had a three-wheeled bike as a child because my balance wasn’t good, so I was afraid of falling. I used it for a few years until I felt confident enough to try a regular bicycle.

제안: Give a direct answer then provide two specific reasons using linking words. Remove hesitations and vague phrases like “or something.” Mention concrete examples (traffic, infrastructure) to make your point clearer.

예시: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular. The main reasons are heavy traffic and a lack of bike lanes, so most people prefer cars. As a result, cycling is mostly limited to parks or dedicated cycling paths.

× I did have a bike when I was a child uh, but I had the three wheels bike because I was afraid of failing uh because my balance was not that good.

✓ I did have a bike when I was a child, but it was a three-wheeled bike because I was afraid of falling as my balance was not very good.

The student used 'three wheels bike' which is incorrect noun phrase form; use 'three-wheeled bike'. 'Afraid of failing' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'falling' when talking about losing balance. Also improve article use ('the' to 'it was a') and word choice ('not very good'). Suggested improvement: learn compound adjective formation with -ed ('three-wheeled') and the correct gerund after 'afraid of' ('falling').

× No, I don't think so because we don't have that suitable environment to use uh, bikes and everywhere or, and on the streets or something like that.

✓ No, I don't think so because we don't have a suitable environment for using bikes on the streets or in most places.

The original uses awkward prepositions and articles: 'that suitable environment to use bikes and everywhere or' is ungrammatical. Use 'a suitable environment for using bikes' or 'a suitable environment to ride bikes', and specify locations with 'on the streets' or 'in most places'. Suggested improvement: practice common preposition patterns: 'environment for doing something' and 'ride a bike' or 'use a bike'.

× Uh, we only have. Specific places to use bike.

✓ We only have specific places to ride bikes.

The sentence has an unnecessary period and incorrect article/verb choice: 'use bike' should be 'ride bikes' or 'use a bike'. Also plural 'bikes' fits general meaning. Remove the period and join into one sentence. Suggested improvement: avoid splitting sentences incorrectly; use correct collocations like 'ride a bike' and pluralize when speaking generally.