Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and organize your response. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., what the bike looked like, how old you were, or a memory). Use simple linking words like “when” or “I remember” and avoid unrelated words. Keep to 2–4 short sentences and correct basic grammar (past tense for childhood).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bike with training wheels that my parents bought me when I was six. I remember riding it in the park near our house and feeling very proud when I learned to ride without the wheels.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific, relevant reasons and examples. Use linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “also.” Keep sentences concise and grammatical. Focus on who uses bikes (students, commuters), where (cities, campuses), and why (cheap, healthy, convenient).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many university students ride bikes to campus and people use them to avoid traffic in the city. Also, cycling is becoming more common for exercise and environmental reasons.

× Yeah, I do have a migrant model for child. Balcony. Remember I was UH-15.

✓ Yes, I had a small/mid-sized bike when I was a child. I remember I was about 15.

The original sentence has multiple issues: wrong tense ('do have' vs past 'had') and incorrect or nonsensical word choices ('migrant model for child', 'Balcony', 'UH-15'). These are vocabulary/word choice problems that function like incorrect adjectives or adverbs because the speaker used inappropriate modifiers and fragments. Use 'small' or 'mid-sized' to describe the bike and use the past tense 'had' to match the time frame 'when I was a child'. Replace 'UH-15' (hesitation) with 'about 15' for a clear age reference. Split into complete clauses to avoid fragments. Suggestion: choose correct descriptive adjectives, use past tense for past events, and avoid fillers or transcribe them as pauses rather than words.

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✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, including in small towns and at universities. People have used them for many years and they have been well known since that time.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and incoherent: word order is confused, many incorrect prepositions and pronouns are used, and clauses are run together. This is a sentence structure problem. To fix it, break the idea into clear parts: state the general fact, give specific places (small towns, universities), and add a historical note. Use correct prepositions ('in small towns', 'at universities'), plural nouns ('bikes'), and simple past or present perfect for duration ('have been well known'). Suggestion: organize ideas into short clear sentences, use appropriate prepositions and pronouns, and maintain consistent tense.