Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Используйте более естественные фразы и правильную грамматику. Дайте чёткое вступление (тема), затем пару конкретных деталей, связанных логически. Исправьте времена и местоимения (например, «bought it for me», «it had four wheels», «I changed it», «I removed the training wheels»). Избегайте лишних слов и завершите мысль в 2–4 предложениях. Также используйте связующее слово для логики («then», «after that»).

예시: Yes, I did. My father bought a bike for me when I was five. At first it had four wheels (training wheels), but after I practised a lot I removed them and learned to ride on two wheels.

제안: Сформулируйте прямой ответ и добавьте конкретные причины с логическими связками. Избегайте незавершённых предложений. Используйте слова для связи идей («because», «so», «for example»). Дайте конкретный пример или сравнение (например, велосипед популярен в городах для поездок на работу или как спорт).

예시: Yes, I think they are. Bicycles are popular because many people enjoy cycling for exercise and commuting. For example, in cities you can see many commuters and amateur cyclists riding on bike lanes at weekends.

× Yes, as many kids at the time, I had a bike.

✓ Yes, like many kids at the time, I had a bike.

The phrase 'as many kids at the time' is incorrect in English. Use 'like many kids' to compare the speaker to other children. Replace 'as' with 'like' for similarity comparisons.

× My father bought it to me when I was five years old.

✓ My father bought it for me when I was five years old.

In English, 'buy something for someone' is the correct prepositional pattern. 'Bought it to me' is incorrect; use 'for me' to indicate the recipient.

× First of all, it had four wheels.

✓ First of all, it had training wheels.

The original sentence 'it had four wheels' is grammatically possible but unnatural for a child's bike; often 'training wheels' is used. If keeping literal meaning, it's acceptable; however, to be clearer and idiomatic, use 'training wheels'. No tense change is needed.

× But when I practiced a lot, I change.

✓ But when I practiced a lot, I changed.

The speaker is describing a past event, so the verb must be in simple past 'changed' rather than present 'change'. Use past tense to maintain temporal consistency.

× I removed to.

✓ I took them off.

'Removed to' is incorrect and incomplete. To say you removed the extra wheels, use 'I took them off' or 'I removed them'. Also ensure plural 'them' if referring to training wheels.

× I think yes because there are many sportsmen in my country.

✓ Yes, I think so because there are many athletes in my country.

Use 'I think so' or 'yes' followed by a clause; 'I think yes' is unnatural. Also 'sportsmen' is gender-specific and less common; use 'athletes'. Grammar-wise, sentence is present tense and correct, but wording improvement is suggested.

× There are many people who really like riding a bike or run so

✓ There are many people who really like riding a bike or running.

Coordinate parallel verb forms should match: use 'riding' and 'running' (both gerunds). The trailing 'so' is unnecessary and incomplete; remove it.