Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses (use past simple), remove filler words, and make the meaning about how long you had the bike clear. For example, say how old you were when you got it, how long you kept it, and a brief reason it was special or how it ended.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was about seven and I used it for around ten years, until it finally fell apart. Because I rode it every day to school and to visit friends, it became very worn but also very special to me.

제안: Work on sentence structure, vocabulary choice and provide specific reasons or examples. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two linked reasons using connectors (because, for example, therefore). Replace vague phrases with precise ones (e.g., “widely used” or “affordable”).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines. They are widely used because they are affordable and convenient for short trips, especially in crowded urban areas; for example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or market.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child and it takes umm, 10 years before my bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it lasted about 10 years.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was child' and incorrect phrasing 'it takes 10 years'. Use past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child', include the article 'a' before 'child', and use 'lasted' to describe the duration of the bike's life. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events and use 'last' or 'lasted' for duration (e.g., 'It lasted about 10 years').

× Uh, I mean my bike takes 10 years. The lifespan of my bike and destroyed.

✓ I mean my bike lasted 10 years before it was destroyed.

This contains sentence fragments and wrong verb choices. 'Takes 10 years' is incorrect for describing past duration; use 'lasted 10 years'. 'The lifespan of my bike and destroyed' is a fragment and mixes nouns with verbs. Combine into a single clause: 'lasted 10 years before it was destroyed.' Ensure subject and verb present and use past passive 'was destroyed' if appropriate.

× Well, in our country, yes, it is so much popular because it is the one easiest we use and we can afford in the Philippines.

✓ Well, in our country, yes, they are very popular because they are one of the easiest ways to get around and we can afford them in the Philippines.

The original uses 'it' incorrectly to refer to 'bikes' (plural) and non-idiomatic expressions 'so much popular' and 'the one easiest we use'. Fix subject-verb agreement and plural pronouns: use 'they are' for bikes, 'very popular' (not 'so much popular'), and 'one of the easiest ways to get around' for clarity. Also use 'afford them' to match plural noun. Suggestion: ensure pronouns match noun number and use natural collocations (very popular, one of the easiest ways).