Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and use correct tense and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words and check tense agreement (use past tense consistently).

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child and I often rode it with my family on weekends. For example, we used to cycle along the river path near our house, which I enjoyed because it was a chance to spend time outdoors and bond with them.

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and provide specific reasons. Start with a clear opinion, then give two concrete reasons using linking words (for example, because / moreover). Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g., 'can't write' is incorrect).

예시: No, I don't think cycling is very popular in Korea. Firstly, our cities are densely populated and roads are often crowded, so many people prefer cars or public transport. Secondly, there is limited space for safe cycle lanes in many urban areas, so cycling is less practical for daily commuting.

× I had a bike when I was young because I enjoy riding a bike with my family on the road.

✓ I had a bike when I was young because I enjoyed riding it with my family on the road.

The sentence mixes past ('had', 'was') with present ('enjoy'). Maintain consistent past tense when describing past experiences: change 'enjoy' to 'enjoyed'. Also replace the repeated phrase 'riding a bike' with 'riding it' for conciseness and to avoid repetition.

× I don't think cycling is popular in Korea because in Korea we have a small a small land that's why people can't write

✓ I don't think cycling is popular in Korea because Korea is small, so people don't ride bikes much.

This sentence has several issues: repetition ('a small a small land'), wrong word choice ('write' instead of 'ride'), and poor clause connection. Fix by removing repetition, using the correct verb 'ride', and connecting clauses with 'so' for cause and effect. Also simplify 'have a small land' to 'Korea is small' for natural English.