Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and irrelevant phrases (e.g., "I don't know how to ride a bike" and "I still can't" conveys same idea twice). Mention when you tried and why you didn’t succeed to give the examiner concrete information.

예시: No, I didn't really have a bike as a child. I tried to learn on my cousin's bike when I was about eight, but I never mastered it because I was afraid of falling. As a result, I still can't ride comfortably today.

제안: Give a direct answer then support it with specific reasons and an example. Remove filler words like "like" and avoid repeating words such as "definitely definitely." Use linking words (because, for example, therefore) to improve coherence and include a brief comparison or statistic if possible.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because cities like Taipei are compact and have many bike lanes. For example, many people use shared bikes for short trips to work or to run errands, so cycling is a convenient and common choice.

× I don't know how to ride a bike and I was trying to learn it with my cousin's bike, but now I still can't ride a bike.

✓ I didn't know how to ride a bike when I was a child and I tried to learn with my cousin's bike, but I still can't ride one now.

The original mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'I don't know how to ride a bike and I was trying to learn it with my cousin's bike' should place the inability and attempt in the past because the question asks about childhood. Change 'don't know' to 'didn't know' (past tense) and 'was trying to learn' to 'tried' (simple past) for clarity. Also replace the repeated 'ride a bike' with 'ride one' for conciseness and naturalness. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for events that happened in childhood and use 'one' to avoid repetition.

× Yes they definitely definitely are popular since like Taipei is small and you can go to anywhere with riding bikes.

✓ Yes, they definitely are popular because Taipei is small and you can go anywhere by riding a bike.

Multiple issues: 'since like' is informal and awkward—use 'because' for reason. 'You can go to anywhere' is incorrect; 'to' should be removed ('go anywhere'). 'With riding bikes' is unidiomatic; use 'by riding a bike' or 'by bike.' Also remove the duplicated 'definitely' and add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech. Suggestion: Use 'because' for reasons, drop unnecessary 'to' before 'anywhere', and use 'by riding a bike' or simply 'by bike'.