Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I did), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and self-correction during the answer. Use linking words (e.g., then, later) to show sequence and correct basic grammar (past tense and plural forms).

예시: Yes, I did. My first bike was a small four-wheeled balance bike when I was about three, and later I switched to a proper two-wheeler as I got older. Over the years I have owned several different bikes and I still enjoy cycling today.

제안: Be more specific with examples and avoid slight awkward phrasing. Begin with a clear direct answer, then explain with one or two concrete reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect cause and result (for example, because, therefore).

예시: Yes, they are, especially in my city. The local government has invested in bike lanes and campaigns to reduce emissions, so many people now commute by bicycle instead of by car, particularly during weekdays.

× Yes, I had many bikes when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had many bikes when I was a child.

No change needed; 'many bikes' correctly uses plural for countable noun. (Included for completeness)

× Actually, my first one was when I was around three years old where it was a bike on four wheel on four wheels, sorry, that then I switch to two wheels over the years.

✓ Actually, my first one was when I was around three years old; it was a bike with four wheels, and then I switched to two wheels over the years.

Original sentence has run-on structure, repetition, incorrect word order and wrong verb tense. Use a semicolon or split into clauses to improve structure, use 'a bike with four wheels' for correct preposition and word order, and 'switched' for past tense to match 'was'. Suggestions: split long sentence, remove repeated phrases, use past simple for completed actions.

× And so yeah, I have many bikes until today.

✓ And so yeah, I have had many bikes up to today.

The time expression 'until today' requires present perfect ('have had') to connect past possession with the present. Alternatively, 'I still have many bikes today' uses simple present. Use 'up to today' or 'until now' with present perfect.

× Yes, of course.

✓ Yes, of course.

No grammatical change needed; short answer is acceptable. (Included for completeness)

× And even more in my city, where politics are very focused on reducing gas emissions by encouraging the use of bikes on their roads.

✓ Even more so in my city, where policies are very focused on reducing gas emissions by encouraging the use of bikes on the roads.

Use 'policies' rather than 'politics' when referring to government measures. 'Even more so' is the idiomatic phrase. Use 'on the roads' rather than 'on their roads' because 'their' is vague; 'the roads' is clearer. 'Use of bikes' is fine. 'By encouraging' correctly introduces the method.

× And so that's why you see so many people on bikes more than cars.

✓ And so that's why you see many more people on bikes than in cars.

Original uses incorrect comparison structure. Use 'many more people on bikes than in cars' or 'more people riding bikes than driving cars.' Avoid comparing 'people on bikes more than cars' which compares people to cars. Use parallel structures for clarity.