Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (because the question asks about childhood), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and unclear words (e.g., "cycle clean").

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandfather taught me how to ride it when I was about six, and I practiced with him every weekend. As a result, cycling became a hobby I still enjoy today.

제안: Make your opinion clear at the start, then give specific, well-linked examples. Fix grammar and word order, and avoid filler words like "Case". Use linking words (for example, therefore) and concise sentences (max 5).

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are fairly popular in my country. For example, my university has several bike-rental stations, so students can rent bikes easily. Because of this convenience, I often rent a bike during my free time to get around campus.

× Yes, I have a bike and when I was a child my grandfather taught me how to cycle clean and now cycling is one of my hobbies.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and my grandfather taught me how to ride it, so cycling is now one of my hobbies.

Problems: incorrect tense and word choice. 'I have a bike' conflicts with past context 'when I was a child' — use past 'I had a bike'. 'How to cycle clean' is incorrect wording; use 'how to ride it'. Also improve sentence flow by linking cause and effect and placing 'now' before 'one of my hobbies'. Suggestion: keep past tense for childhood events, use 'ride' for bicycles, and connect clauses clearly.

× Case I think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

'Case' is incorrect here—likely a mispronunciation or typo. Replace with a simple affirmative like 'Yes,' to answer the examiner. Keep present simple 'are' because this is a general statement about current popularity.

× For example, in my university there are some places that allow people to or students to rent the bike.

✓ For example, at my university there are places that allow people or students to rent bikes.

Problems: preposition and quantifier/article use. Use 'at my university' not 'in'. 'Some places' is acceptable but can be shortened to 'places'. 'Rent the bike' implies a specific bike; use plural 'rent bikes' for general ability. Also remove redundant 'to or'. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'at', and use plural 'bikes' for general statements.

× So when during the free time I will I always rent it

✓ So during my free time I always rent one.

Problems: incorrect word order and unnecessary future marker 'will' with 'always' for habitual action. Use present simple 'I always rent' for habitual actions. 'So when during the free time' is awkward; use 'during my free time'. Replace 'it' with 'one' or 'a bike' to refer back clearly. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and correct word order.