Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain the reason with specific detail and one linking word. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., avoid 'even until now' — use 'even now') and remove duplicated words.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. In fact, I still can't ride a bicycle because I struggle with balancing, so my family never bought one for me.

제안: Organise the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by two concise reasons connected with linking words. Avoid repeating words ('faster faster') and unnecessary phrases like 'currently I'm staying'. Use specific vocabulary (public transport, humid, infrastructure).

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in Hong Kong. Mainly people prefer public transport because it is faster and more convenient, and also the hot, humid weather makes cycling uncomfortable for many.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

No change needed. The sentence correctly uses the past tense to describe a past situation: 'didn't have' and 'was' are appropriate.

× It was because even until now I don't really know how to ride a bicycle and I'm pretty bad at balancing myself myself.

✓ This is because, even now, I don't really know how to ride a bicycle and I'm pretty bad at balancing myself.

The sentence mixes past and present awkwardly. Use 'This is because' to connect the reason to the current inability. Remove the repeated word 'myself' and place commas around 'even now' for clarity.

× I don't think bikes are popular in my country because currently I'm staying in Hong Kong and people tend to use public transport more than riding bikes because it is more convenient and faster faster and another thing is because the weather is so hot in Hong Kong so they don't really like riding bikes.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because I currently live in Hong Kong, and people tend to use public transport rather than ride bikes because it is more convenient and faster. Also, the weather in Hong Kong is very hot, so people don't really like riding bikes.

Multiple problems: 'staying' is better as 'live' for a habitual situation (present tense). Use 'rather than ride bikes' instead of 'more than riding bikes' for correct parallel structure. Remove the repeated word 'faster'. Break into two sentences for clarity and use 'Also' to introduce the additional reason. Replace 'so hot' with 'very hot' for natural phrasing.