Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise, natural and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words (e.g., “many many”) and unnecessary honorifics like “Sir.” Keep to under five sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., gifted → given; trips → rides).

예시: Yes. I was given a bike for my 15th birthday. It was red with pink flower decals, and I rode it often around my neighborhood and to school. However, I haven’t used it for a few years because I now travel by car.

제안: Clarify your opinion and avoid hesitations and unclear phrases. Provide a direct topic sentence (Yes/No/It depends), then give specific supporting reasons and examples using linking words like 'however' or 'for example.' Correct awkward phrases (‘on a recordly’, ‘implemented them into their routine’) to natural expressions such as ‘regularly’ and ‘incorporate cycling into their daily routine.’ Keep it within three sentences.

예시: It depends. While many people prefer public transport or driving, a growing number of people cycle regularly, especially in cities with bike lanes. For example, commuters often cycle to work to avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes Sir, I had a bike which was gifted to me from my parents on my 15th birthday.

✓ Yes Sir, I had a bike that was gifted to me by my parents on my 15th birthday.

This sentence has a preposition choice issue combined with a relative clause wording problem (use of 'from' with 'gifted' and 'which' for people). The main grammatical category to report is past tense context is correct but the phrasing 'gifted to me from my parents' is non-idiomatic. Use 'gifted to me by my parents' or 'that my parents gifted me' for correct passive agent expression. Also use 'that' instead of 'which' for a defining relative clause.

× It was a very beautiful bike which was red and also had the pink flowers on it.

✓ It was a very beautiful bike that was red and also had pink flowers on it.

Using 'the pink flowers' implies specific flowers already known; general description needs no definite article. Also use 'that' for the defining relative clause. This falls under adjective/adverb and article use; correction removes the unnecessary 'the' and improves relative clause choice.

× I used it very much on many many trips but unfortunately I haven't used it in a few years.

✓ I used it a lot on many trips, but unfortunately I haven't used it for a few years.

The student mixes simple past 'used' with present perfect 'haven't used' correctly to contrast past habitual action with a state continuing to the present. Main problems: 'very much on many many trips' is awkward; use 'a lot' and remove repetition. Also use 'for a few years' (duration) with present perfect negative, not 'in a few years' which indicates future. Classified under past tense/problem with tense choice and preposition use for durations.

× It depends. I think many people prefer, uh, public transportation or driving their cars, but there are many that they use bikes on a recordly and uh, they implemented them into their routine.

✓ It depends. I think many people prefer public transportation or driving their cars, but many people also use bikes regularly and have incorporated them into their routines.

This sentence has multiple issues: awkward filler words, incorrect pronoun use 'there are many that they', incorrect adverb 'on a recordly', wrong verb 'implemented' for habitual action, and plural agreement in 'routine' -> 'routines'. The corrected version fixes pronoun use, replaces the incorrect adverb with 'regularly', and uses 'have incorporated' to indicate integration into routines. Classified as sentence structure errors (and touches on incorrect adverb and pronoun use).