Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid filler words (like, you know). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (what the bike looked like and a short reason why you liked it). Use linking words for coherence (for example, because, so). Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. It was a small blue bike with four training wheels because I couldn’t balance well yet. I enjoyed riding it around the park with my friends, and it helped me gain confidence before I switched to a regular two-wheeled bike.

제안: Open with a clear statement that directly answers the question, then give 2 specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, since, therefore). Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g., ‘developing country’ instead of ‘underdeveloping’). Use precise vocabulary such as ‘common’, ‘affordable’, ‘primary mode of transport’.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. This is because they are affordable and fuel-efficient, which makes them practical for daily commuting. In addition, narrow streets and traffic congestion often make bikes faster than cars for short trips, so many people rely on them as their primary mode of transport.

× It was like a small bike with like 4 tires that could control my bike because as a child it's you cannot like control the whole bike.

✓ It was a small bike with four extra wheels that could help control my bike because as a child you cannot control a full-sized bike.

Original sentence misuses 'like' as filler and uses 'tires' instead of 'wheels' and awkward clause order. The main grammatical issue is verb + -ing form and sentence structure: 'could control my bike' is unclear; 'help control' is more appropriate. Also 'it's you cannot' is ungrammatical; use 'you cannot'. Use 'four' instead of numeral and 'extra wheels' to indicate stabilizers. Suggestion: remove filler words, simplify clause order, and use 'help control' for correct verb usage.

× So you need like extra tires to control the bike.

✓ So you need extra wheels to control the bike.

This sentence contains unnecessary filler 'like' and uses 'tires' where 'wheels' (or 'training wheels') is more natural. The verb structure is otherwise fine; reducing fillers improves clarity. Suggestion: remove 'like' and use the correct noun 'wheels' or 'training wheels'.

× So it was really kind of fun like driving those cycle.

✓ So it was really fun to ride those cycles.

The phrase 'really kind of fun like driving those cycle' mixes adverbs and fillers incorrectly and uses 'driving' with 'cycle' (bikes are ridden, not driven) and incorrect plural 'cycle'. Use 'fun to ride' and plural 'cycles'. Suggestion: replace 'driving' with 'ride', remove redundant modifiers, and correct pluralization.

× Yes, of course, no doubt bike is one of the like most more most main medium of transportation in our country.

✓ Yes, of course, there is no doubt that bicycles are one of the main means of transportation in our country.

Multiple issues: singular/plural mismatch ('bike' vs 'bicycles'), article and noun agreement ('one of the ... means'), redundant words ('most more most main'). The grammatical type requested is singular/plural. Use plural 'bicycles' and plural noun 'means' after 'one of the'. Also add 'there is' to form natural clause. Suggestion: eliminate redundancies and ensure noun number agreement.

× It is a developing underdeveloping country and like many people can afford car.

✓ It is a developing or underdeveloped country, and many people cannot afford cars.

Original mixes 'developing' and 'underdeveloping' incorrectly and has pronoun/verb issues ('many people can afford car' is ungrammatical). The main grammatical issue matched is 'There be issue' because the sentence lacks correct existential phrasing; however the bigger problems are word choice and pluralization. Correct to 'developing or underdeveloped country' and use negative meaning 'cannot afford cars' to match intended idea. Also pluralize 'cars'. Suggestion: choose one accurate descriptor and use 'cannot afford cars' if meaning is that people lack money for cars.

× So most people drive bike and like it's their main major source of transport.

✓ So most people ride bikes, and they are their main means of transport.

Issues include verb/noun usage and article/number agreement. 'Drive bike' is incorrect for bicycles — use 'ride bikes'. The phrase 'it's their main major source' is redundant; use 'they are the main means of transport' or 'it is their main means of transport'. The chosen grammar problem type is third person singular because 'it's' (it is) was misused; better to use 'they are' or 'it is' with correct referent. Suggestion: use 'ride bikes' and 'main means of transport', and avoid redundant modifiers.