Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (past tense agreement and article use), reduce redundancy, and add a clear topic sentence with one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words if adding details. For example, say when you had the bike, what kind it was, and one brief memory or reason why you liked it.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a small red mountain bike that I used to ride around my neighborhood every afternoon, and I loved it because it made me feel independent. For example, I would cycle to the park with my friends and practice small tricks, which became my favorite hobby.

제안: Remove fillers (uh, well) and make the statement more specific and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concrete reasons or an example using a linking word (for example, because, therefore, for instance). Mention any statistics or typical situations if possible.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because many cities have wide, flat roads and affordable bike lanes. For instance, many teenagers and students cycle to school every day, which reduces traffic and saves on transport costs.

× Yes, honestly, I had a bike when I were a child and I really like it.

✓ Yes, honestly, I had a bike when I was a child and I really liked it.

The clause 'when I were a child' uses the wrong verb form for singular subject 'I'; correct is 'I was' (subject-verb agreement / past tense). Also the sentence mixes past 'had' with present 'like'; because the context asks about childhood, use past tense 'liked' to keep tenses consistent. Suggestion: use 'I was' for past reference and keep verbs in past tense when describing past habits (e.g., 'I had... and I liked it').

× I really like to ride my bike and it was my hobby I think.

✓ I really liked to ride my bike and it was my hobby, I think.

The speaker shifts between present 'I really like' and past 'it was' when referring to a childhood pastime. Because the context is past (childhood), use past tense 'liked' to maintain tense consistency. Also add a comma before 'I think' for clarity. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent by using past tense when describing past activities ('I really liked to ride my bike').

× Well, yes, of course. Uh, bikes in my country are really popular because, uh, we have a lot of roads and uh, a lot of teenagers, uh, use a bike to go to school.

✓ Well, yes, of course. Bikes in my country are really popular because we have a lot of roads and many teenagers use bikes to go to school.

Several issues: unnecessary filler words removed for clarity. 'A lot of teenagers' is acceptable but 'many teenagers' is more natural before a plural noun. The phrase 'use a bike' suggests each uses one unspecified bike; better to use the plural 'use bikes' to indicate the general habit (singular/plural usage and article use). Also remove extra commas. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking about general habits ('many teenagers use bikes') and choose 'many' or 'a lot of' consistently.