Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct tense and articles, reduce hesitations, and structure your reply with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. For example, start with a past-tense topic sentence (I didn’t have a bike as a child), then give a brief reason and one additional detail. Avoid filler sounds (umm, uh) and grammatical errors (articles, verb forms).

예시: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family was middle-class, so my parents couldn’t afford a motorbike for me, and I was also too young to ride safely.

제안: Give a clear direct opinion first, then add specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, for example, so) and avoid repetition and fillers. Correct word order and comparative phrases (more popular than other vehicles) will improve clarity. Provide one concise example or consequence to support your view.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for city traffic. For example, many people buy newly launched motorbikes to commute quickly, so motorcycle sales have increased in recent years.

× I do not have any, umm, bike when I was child because I am from the middle class family.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was from a middle-class family.

The sentence mixes present tense ('do not have', 'am') with past context ('when I was a child'). Use past tense consistently: 'did not have' and 'was'. Also 'any bike' is unnatural here; use 'a bike'. Add the article 'a' before 'child' and hyphenate 'middle-class'. Suggestion: maintain past tense for childhood statements and use correct articles and adjective forms.

× My parents cannot afford motorbike for me and that was not uh, my age to ride a bike.

✓ My parents could not afford a motorbike for me, and I was not old enough to ride a bike.

The sentence should use past ability/possibility modal 'could' rather than present 'cannot' because it refers to the past. Also add the article 'a' before 'motorbike'. The phrase 'was not my age' is unidiomatic; use 'was not old enough'. Suggestion: use 'could not' to describe past capability and choose idiomatic expressions for age and ability.

× Items in my country uh, bikes are more popular because uh, our country's citizens are very uh, curious about the new, new motorbikes, which has launched recently in our country and they prefer more bike than the vehicles, other vehicles.

✓ In my country, bikes are very popular because people are interested in the recently launched motorbikes, and they prefer bikes to other vehicles.

The original sentence has several structure and agreement issues: 'Items in my country' is unnecessary and awkward; begin with 'In my country'. 'Our country's citizens' is wordy; 'people' is clearer. 'New, new motorbikes' is repetitive. The relative clause uses wrong verb agreement ('which has launched' should be passive 'which were launched' or simpler 'recently launched'). Use comparative structure 'prefer bikes to other vehicles' instead of 'prefer more bike than the vehicles'. Suggestion: simplify phrasing, correct verb agreement, remove repetition, and use 'prefer X to Y' for comparisons.

× which has launched recently in our country

✓ which were launched recently in our country

The clause refers to motorbikes that were launched (passive) in the past; therefore use past participle with appropriate auxiliary 'were' for plural 'motorbikes' ('were launched'). Using 'has launched' incorrectly uses active voice and singular agreement. Suggestion: use passive past 'were launched' or rephrase as 'recently launched motorbikes'.

× they prefer more bike than the vehicles, other vehicles.

✓ they prefer bikes to other vehicles.

Pronoun and noun number/agreement issues: 'prefer more bike than the vehicles' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'bikes' to match general preference and the standard comparative structure 'prefer X to Y'. Remove redundant 'the' before 'other vehicles'. Suggestion: use 'prefer bikes to other vehicles' for clear and grammatical comparison.