Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details linked logically. Use linking words (for example, "because" and "also") correctly and correct small grammar issues (e.g., "one of the reasons"). Aim for varied vocabulary (e.g., "afford" only once).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. Because I grew up in a small village, my family couldn’t afford one, and my school was within walking distance, so a bike wasn’t necessary.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence followed by two specific reasons with linking words and more precise vocabulary. Avoid awkward phrases like "transportation means" and use plural agreement ("use them"). Give a short example or result to strengthen the answer.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them because they are a cheap and convenient way to get around cities, and others ride bikes to earn money, for example by delivering food.

× Actually when I was a child, I did not have a bike.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I didn't have a bike.

The sentence uses past tense and is correct in meaning. Correction applies punctuation and contraction for natural speech. Suggestion: use appropriate punctuation and optionally contractions for spoken English.'

× I was in the village.

✓ I lived in a village.

'Was in the village' is grammatically possible but unnatural for describing childhood residence. Use 'lived in a village' to express where you grew up. Suggestion: use 'live/lived' for residence.'

× So usually in the village it is difficult to even afford.

✓ So usually in the village it was difficult even to afford things like a bike.

Original lacks a clear subject and object and mixes present tense 'is' with past context. Correct by matching past tense and adding an object (things like a bike) to make meaning clear. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and include what is difficult to afford.'

× So my parents did not have money to afford a bike for me and also my school was near.

✓ So my parents did not have money to afford a bike for me, and my school was nearby.

Tense 'did not have' is fine; change 'near' to adverb 'nearby' to describe location and add punctuation to join clauses. Suggestion: use adverbial form for location.'

× So I also think that was one of one of the reason.

✓ So I also think that was one of the reasons.

Phrase repeats 'one of' and uses singular 'reason' after 'one of', which requires plural 'reasons'. This is a subject/noun agreement and word choice issue. Suggestion: remove repetition and use plural 'reasons'.'

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no verb change needed because 'bikes' is plural and 'are' agrees. No change required. Suggestion: none.'

× Many people use it as a transportation means which is very convenient to work around the city and also most people use it as a means to earn money when riding the bike.

✓ Many people use them as a means of transportation because they are very convenient for getting around the city, and many people also use bikes to earn money by riding them.

Original uses 'it' to refer to plural 'bikes' (pronoun agreement error) and awkward phrases 'transportation means' and 'to work around the city.' Also inconsistent structure in second clause. Corrections: use plural pronouns 'them', phrase 'means of transportation', 'getting around the city', and clarify 'earn money by riding them'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree with antecedents and choose natural collocations.'