Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Break your response into a clear topic sentence and one or two concise supporting sentences. Avoid run-on sentences and irrelevant phrasing. Use linking words (for example, because/so/after) correctly and give specific details (when, where, who taught you). Keep the answer within 3–4 short sentences to sound natural and coherent.

예시: Yes. I had a pink bike that my parents bought me when I was seven. I learned to ride it in about a week because my older cousin taught me, and after that I felt confident. I often rode it around my neighborhood with a close friend.

제안: Start with a direct short opinion sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so, besides). Avoid vague phrases and grammatical errors (e.g. “people regarding” should be “people regard”). Provide a concrete example or statistic if possible to strengthen the answer.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. Because cities are compact, many destinations are within short distances, people often cycle to supermarkets and parks. Besides, many people regard cycling as part of a low-carbon lifestyle, which increases its popularity.

× I had a pink bike which was bought by my parents when I was seven years old because pink was my favorite color around that time and after learning how to ride a bike and which cost me around a week and I felt really confident and happy.

✓ I had a pink bike that my parents bought for me when I was seven years old. Pink was my favorite color at the time. It took me about a week to learn how to ride, and I felt really confident and happy.

The original contains multiple clauses joined incorrectly and some misplaced relative clauses, causing a run-on and unclear references. Break into separate sentences and place relative clauses next to the noun they modify: use 'that my parents bought for me' instead of 'which was bought by my parents'. Use 'it took me about a week to learn how to ride' to express duration correctly. These changes improve clarity and grammatical structure.

× So I rode my bike around my neighborhood with my little friend.

✓ So I rode my bike around my neighborhood with my little friend.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'my little friend' could be ambiguous (age or size). No pronoun error identified that matches the provided list, so keep the sentence. If clarity is desired, use 'my young friend' or 'a close friend' depending on meaning.

× Yeah, I think bicycles are popular in my country which is very compact.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country because it is quite compact.

The relative clause 'which is very compact' incorrectly follows 'my country' without a clear connection; using 'because' clarifies the cause. Also 'yeah' is informal; 'yes' fits a test context better.

× So many places are within a very short distance and it is very convenient for people to ride bicycles to some supermarkets or parks, and besides people regarding riding a bicycle as a part of their low carbon lifestyle.

✓ Many places are within a very short distance, so it is convenient for people to ride bicycles to supermarkets or parks. Besides, people regard riding a bicycle as part of a low-carbon lifestyle.

'Within a very short distance' is acceptable, but the sentence was long and contained incorrect verb forms: 'regarding' should be 'regard' (correct verb choice) and 'as a part of their low carbon lifestyle' is better as 'as part of a low-carbon lifestyle'. Also remove 'some' before 'supermarkets or parks' for naturalness and add commas to separate clauses.