Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly address the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two relevant supporting details. Avoid irrelevant information (e.g., academic achievement) unless you link it clearly to the bike. Use varied vocabulary and a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I did. I received my first bike as a gift from my father when I finished sixth grade, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood. Because it was lightweight and well-made, I used it every day to visit friends and run small errands.

제안: Make your opinion clear in the topic sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words. Improve grammar (avoid repetition like “convenient convenience”) and use precise words (e.g., public transport, cars). Limit to 2–4 sentences and include one specific example or consequence.

예시: Not as much as before. Nowadays many people prefer cars or public transport because cities are larger and distances are longer, so cycling is less practical. For example, commuters often take the tram to avoid long, unsafe rides on busy roads.

× Actually I remember the time when I got first position in class during 6th standard.

✓ Actually I remember the time when I got the first position in class in 6th standard.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'first position' and awkward preposition 'during' for grade; use 'in 6th standard'. This keeps past tense consistent and sounds natural. Suggestion: Use 'the' with ordinal+position (the first position) and 'in' for school grade (in 6th standard).

× Nowadays, bikes are not as popular as compared to the past time because convenient convenience is more important for people and they like to travel by car or by tram or trains rather than riding a bike.

✓ Nowadays, bikes are not as popular as in the past because convenience is more important to people and they prefer to travel by car, tram, or train rather than ride a bike.

Multiple issues: awkward comparative phrasing 'not as popular as compared to the past time' should be 'not as popular as in the past'; repeated/incorrect word 'convenient convenience' should be 'convenience'; preposition 'important for people' better as 'important to people'; parallel verb choice 'like to travel... rather than riding' should be 'prefer to travel... rather than ride' for parallelism and correct verb form. Suggestion: Use simpler comparative forms, avoid repetition, ensure parallel structure, and choose correct prepositions.

× I think that's a challenging task for every people.

✓ I think that's a challenging task for everyone.

'Every people' is incorrect; 'people' is plural and cannot follow 'every'. Use 'everyone' or 'every person'. Suggestion: Use 'everyone' for singular meaning 'every person' or 'every' + singular noun (every person).