Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (uh) and grammar errors (e.g., use 'stroll' or 'ride around', and correct tense/agreement).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends, exploring local streets and visiting small shops. Because of that, I have many fond memories of being outdoors and feeling independent.

제안: Answer directly, then give one clear reason with specific details and a linking word. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'uncomfortable' instead of 'uneasy', 'ride bikes' instead of 'to bikes', and 'mostly use public transport'). Avoid repetition.

예시: Not really. Because Indonesia is hot and humid, many people find it uncomfortable to ride bikes in city centers, so they mostly use motorbikes or public transport instead. As a result, cycling is more common in parks or rural areas than in busy urban streets.

× I used to use it, uh, to strolling around the neighborhood, the street with my friend.

✓ I used to use it, uh, to stroll around the neighborhood and the streets with my friends.

The verb after 'to' should be in the base form (infinitive), not the -ing form. Also pluralize 'friend' to 'friends' if referring to more than one, and use 'and' for listing. Suggestion: use 'to stroll' and 'friends' if speaking about multiple companions.

× And it was so fun actually, because we can see through the city, we can see our neighborhood doing something.

✓ And it was so fun actually, because we could see around the city and see our neighborhood doing things.

Tense consistency: the sentence begins in past tense ('it was'), so modal 'can' should be past 'could'. 'See through the city' is unnatural; use 'see around the city'. 'Doing something' should be pluralized to 'doing things' to be natural. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout and choose natural prepositions.

× And yeah, it was so.

✓ And yeah, it was great.

The fragment 'it was so' is incomplete and does not convey the intended meaning. Replace with a complete adjective phrase like 'it was great' or 'it was so much fun' to finish the thought. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by completing the adjective or noun phrase.

× I don't think bikes are popular in my country since it's a humid and very hot climate in Indonesia, it's uneasy to people to bikes around the city center or something like that.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because Indonesia has a humid and very hot climate, and it's difficult for people to ride bikes around the city center.

Awkward phrasing and tense: 'since' can mean cause but 'because' is clearer. 'It's a humid and very hot climate in Indonesia' is redundant; use 'Indonesia has a humid and very hot climate.' 'It's uneasy to people to bikes' is incorrect: use 'it's difficult for people to ride bikes.' Maintain present tense for general statements. Suggestion: use 'because', restructure clause about climate, and use 'ride' as the verb for using bikes.

× They are previously used public transport.

✓ They previously used public transport.

Incorrect use of 'are previously used' mixes present passive with an adverb 'previously'. The intended meaning is past simple active: 'they previously used public transport.' Suggestion: use simple past for completed habitual actions in the past: 'previously used.'

× Other than that, yeah, it's very hot here.

✓ Other than that, it's very hot here.

The filler 'yeah' is unnecessary and interrupts the sentence flow. For a concise answer, remove it. Suggestion: omit filler words in formal speech to make sentences clearer.