Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and slightly longer while staying within five sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide a brief reason or detail. Use a linking word to connect ideas and avoid vague phrasing like "didn't last long for me."

예시: Yes, I did — I had a small red bike when I was about seven. However, it didn't last long because I quickly outgrew it and the gears broke. As a result, I stopped using it regularly and eventually sold it.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific, accurate details and correct grammar. Use linking words to show contrast (e.g., "however") and avoid vague or confusing phrases. Be careful with sensitive or political statements: state facts clearly and briefly. Correct grammatical errors (subject-verb agreement, articles) and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "bike-sharing schemes" instead of "BA bikes").

예시: Yes, bicycles are broadly popular in my country, especially for short trips and exercise. However, in some cities access can be limited: for example, bike-sharing schemes are restricted for women in certain areas due to local regulations. Therefore, popularity varies a lot depending on the region.

× Yes, they are popular, but it's kind of illegal here because in some cities a woman aren't allowed to borrow their BA bikes because a regime thinks it's kind of.

✓ Yes, they are popular, but it's kind of illegal here because in some cities a woman isn't allowed to borrow her BA bike because a regime thinks so.

Errors: 'a woman aren't' mismatches third-person singular subject with plural verb form; use 'isn't'. Pronoun agreement: 'their' should match 'a woman' (singular) so use 'her'. Noun number: 'bikes' should be singular to match 'a woman' and 'BA bike' assumed to be a single type; keep consistent. Phrase 'because a regime thinks it's kind of' is ungrammatical and vague; replace with 'because a regime thinks so' for clarity. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement for third-person singular (he/she/it + is/was/does), match pronouns to the noun's number, and use clear concluding phrases like 'thinks so' or complete the idea (e.g., 'thinks it is inappropriate').