Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “since” → “when” or use “from the age of”). Keep the response within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I had a bike from the age of five. My parents bought it for me, and my grandparents taught me to ride it before I started primary school. At first it was difficult, but after a few months of practice I learned to ride confidently.

제안: Avoid hesitation and repetition; use correct subject-verb agreement and more precise wording. Begin with a direct statement, then add one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Keep sentences clear and concise.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in Vietnam. Because many children learn to ride them to get to school, biking is a common and convenient way to travel in towns and smaller cities.

× My parents bought me a bike since, uh, when I was five years old.

✓ My parents bought me a bike when I was five years old.

Use 'since' incorrectly with a past simple time point. 'Since' requires a starting point continuing to present or a perfect tense (e.g., 'have had since'). Here the simple past 'bought' refers to a specific time in the past, so use 'when' to indicate the age at that time. Suggestion: replace 'since' with 'when' or rephrase to 'have had since I was five' if you mean possession continuing to now.

× My grandparents taught me how to ride it before I got into primary school.

✓ My grandparents taught me how to ride it before I started primary school.

'Got into primary school' is informal and slightly awkward; 'started primary school' is more natural for past events. The sentence uses past tense appropriately, so only wording change needed for naturalness.

× It was pretty difficult at first, but after a few months of practicing and falling, I finally knew how to.

✓ It was pretty difficult at first, but after a few months of practice and falling, I finally learned how to ride.

After 'months of' use a noun ('practice') rather than the verb form 'practicing' for smoother style. Also 'knew how to' is incomplete; use 'learned how to ride' or 'knew how to ride'. 'Learned' is the correct past tense to show acquisition of skill.

× Well, of course, yes, I have to say that almost every Vietnamese person know how, knows how to ride a bike since they were a little kid, uh, they learned how to ride a bike to go to school every single day.

✓ Well, of course. I have to say that almost every Vietnamese person knows how to ride a bike because they learn when they are little and often ride to school every day.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('person know' should be 'person knows') and inconsistent tense usage with 'since they were a little kid' plus 'learned' mixing past and present. For general facts use simple present: 'knows' and 'learn when they are little'. Replace 'since' with 'when' for general habitual actions. Also split into clearer clauses. Suggestion: use simple present for general truths and maintain consistent tense.

× Well, of course, yes, I have to say that almost every Vietnamese person know how, knows how to ride a bike since they were a little kid, uh, they learned how to ride a bike to go to school every single day.

✓ Well, of course. I have to say that almost every Vietnamese person knows how to ride a bike because they learn when they are little and often ride to school every day.

The original contains a repeated phrase 'know how, knows how' and an unclear pronoun reference. Condense to a single clause and ensure pronoun and verb forms agree. Use 'they' to refer to people in general and match it with plural verb forms ('learn', 'ride').