Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Good direct response with a clear topic sentence and specific supporting detail (small red bike, riding with friends, learning to keep balance). To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a linking word to connect ideas more smoothly. Also vary vocabulary a bit (e.g., 'learned to balance' or 'mastered balancing') and keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike that I rode around the neighborhood with my friends every weekend. I especially remember how proud I felt when I finally learned to keep my balance and ride without training wheels.

제안: The answer is short and direct but contains a logical error (saying bikes are popular because they are expensive) and an imprecise phrase ('most of everyone'). Improve by correcting the reason—mention affordability, convenience, or culture—and add one specific supporting detail and a linking word. Use precise vocabulary ('affordable', 'widely used').

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work or to run errands in crowded city areas, so cycling is a common everyday choice.

× Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are expensive and accessible to most of everyone.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and accessible to most people.

The original sentence uses 'expensive and accessible to most of everyone', which is contradictory and awkward. 'Most of everyone' is incorrect phrasing; use 'most people' for a correct quantifier. If the intended meaning is that bicycles are cheap, use 'inexpensive' rather than 'expensive'. The corrected sentence removes the contradiction and uses the proper quantifier 'most people'.