Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and better structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and long run-on sentences. Also give a brief reflection or result to finish the answer.

예시: Yes, I did. My dad bought me a bicycle when I was about twelve, and although I couldn't ride it at first, I learned quickly. As a result, I spent a lot of time cycling around the neighbourhood, which was both fun and helped me become more confident.

제안: Make the response more natural and specific: begin with a direct opinion, then give two clear, linked reasons with concrete examples or comparisons. Replace filler phrases like 'like' with precise language and use linking words (for example, moreover).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Firstly, many people use them for short trips and commuting around towns because they are cheap and convenient. Moreover, a growing number of people cycle for exercise and leisure, especially on weekends when parks and bike paths are busy.

× Yes, I did have a bike I think my dad bought it for me when I was only twelve years old and at the time I didn't even know how to ride a bike but when he bought it for me I was really excited and that's when I knew how to even ride it. So really I really enjoyed my time having

✓ Yes, I did have a bike. I think my dad bought it for me when I was only twelve years old, and at the time I didn't even know how to ride a bike, but when he bought it I was really excited and that's when I learned how to ride it. So I really enjoyed having it.

Multiple past-tense reporting verbs are used, but the original sentence is a run-on with punctuation and verb choice issues. 'Knew how to even ride it' is unnatural; use 'learned how to ride it' to indicate acquiring the skill in the past. Add punctuation to separate clauses and remove redundant words ('really' repeated). Suggestions: break into shorter sentences, use 'learned' for acquiring past ability, and remove repetition.

× Yes, they are because a lot of people use them for like walking around. Secondly they use bikes for exercising so they really are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, they are because a lot of people use them for getting around. Secondly, they use bikes for exercise, so they really are popular in my country.

'Use them for like walking around' is awkward and uses 'walking around' incorrectly with bikes; 'getting around' (meaning traveling locally) is more appropriate. 'For exercising' is less natural than the noun 'for exercise'. Add a comma after 'Secondly' and between clauses for clarity. Suggestions: choose context-appropriate prepositional phrases ('for getting around', 'for exercise') and punctuate coordinating adverbs and clauses properly.