Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your response is clear and directly answers the question with a topic sentence and a supporting detail. To improve, make the language more natural (use 'ride' instead of 'drive'), avoid redundant phrases, and add one brief specific detail (e.g., color, who taught you, or a memorable experience) to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and my father taught me how to ride it in our neighborhood park. I remember feeling proud the first time I rode it around the block by myself.

제안: Your answer responds to the question but is repetitive, hesitates, and ends abruptly. To improve, give a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, 'first,' 'also,' 'finally') to present two or three specific reasons or examples (e.g., commuting, exercise, environmental benefits). Avoid filler words like 'uh' and finish the final thought.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, many people use them to commute because they are cheap and help save fuel. Also, some people ride bikes for exercise and leisure on weekends, and finally cities promote cycling to reduce traffic and pollution.

× It was a bicycle with training wheels at the back for me to be able to drive safely.

✓ It was a bicycle with training wheels on the back so I could ride it safely.

The original sentence uses 'for me to be able to drive safely,' which is wordy and uses 'drive' (incorrect verb for bicycles). This is a style/verb choice issue and involves use of verb forms. Replace the infinitive structure with a clearer clause using 'so I could ride it safely.' Also change preposition 'at' to 'on' for the location of the training wheels.

× Bikes are popular in my country because first, it is used to save fuel and uh, mainly its purpose is for transportation.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country because, first, they are used to save fuel and mainly serve as transportation.

The sentence uses 'it' and 'its' to refer to 'bikes' (plural), which is a pronoun agreement error. Replace 'it'/'its' with the plural pronouns or rephrase: 'they are used' and 'serve as transportation.' Also simplify 'mainly its purpose is for transportation' to 'mainly serve as transportation' for grammatical clarity.

× Aside from transportation, it is.

✓ Aside from transportation, people also use bikes for recreation and exercise.

The original sentence 'Aside from transportation, it is.' is incomplete and lacks a clear verb or object, resulting in an incomplete sentence. Provide a full clause that explains other uses of bikes, e.g., 'people also use bikes for recreation and exercise.' This fixes sentence structure and completes the thought.