Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammar and vocabulary errors. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question. 2) Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood (e.g., “I had” or “I received”). 3) Provide 1–2 specific supporting details (who gave it, how often you used it) and use linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”, “and”) to connect ideas. 4) Keep the response concise (max 3–4 short sentences).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my eighth birthday, and I practised riding it every afternoon. Because I rode it daily, I became very confident and enjoyed cycling with my friends on weekends.

제안: This answer is confusing and contains incorrect words (e.g., “brain”, unclear comparisons). To improve: 1) Start with a direct opinion (e.g., “Yes, they are” or “No, not really”). 2) Give clear reasons and specific examples (e.g., traffic, cost, culture). 3) Use linking words (e.g., “because”, “however”, “for example”) to make the reason coherent. 4) Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “bicycles”, “popular”, “young people”, “transport”).

예시: Not really — bicycles are not very popular as a mode of transport in my country because many people prefer motorcycles or cars due to long distances and heavy traffic. However, cycling is becoming more common among young people as a hobby, especially for fitness and weekend rides.

× Yes definitely I have arrived and I wore the shoe hood because I get a gift for my birthday, my father provide me special day and I practice driving bicycle in every day.

✓ Yes. When I was a child I had a bike because I received it as a birthday gift from my father, and I practiced riding it every day.

Multiple sentence structure and tense errors: the student mixes present and past tenses and uses incorrect verbs and phrases (have arrived, wore the shoe hood, get a gift, provide me special day). Suggestions: keep past tense when describing childhood (use had, received, practiced), use correct verbs for riding a bike (ride/riding), and split into clearer clauses or sentences. Use 'every day' as two words and refer to the bike with 'it' after mentioning it once.

× Not at all because the brain are not popular in the country.

✓ Not at all, because bicycles are not very popular in the country.

Subject-verb and word choice errors: 'brain' is incorrect word choice and 'are' agrees with plural but sentence meaning was unclear. Suggestions: use the correct noun 'bicycles' and keep verb agreement consistent; 'are not very popular' is a natural phrase.

× Nowadays, the younger people like bicycles prefer toys.

✓ Nowadays, younger people prefer toys to bicycles.

Incorrect sentence structure and word order: the original places 'like bicycles' awkwardly. Suggestion: use the comparative structure 'prefer X to Y' or 'prefer Y to X' and place adjectives before nouns ('younger people').