Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid hesitation and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, mention when you learned and why you stopped riding (if applicable). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words like “uh” or repeated phrases.

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child; my cousins taught me how to ride when I was about seven. However, I stopped riding in my teenage years and have mostly forgotten how to balance properly, so I cannot ride confidently now.

제안: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and one brief example. Reduce hesitations and avoid vague phrases like “kind of.” Use linking words (However, Recently, For example) to make your response coherent.

예시: Bikes are becoming more popular in my country. Recently, new streets with dedicated bike lanes have been built, and the government is promoting cycling through awareness campaigns; however, many people still prefer cars, so bike lanes are not yet widely used.

× When I was a child I had a bike and my cousins taught me how to ride a bike.

✓ When I was a child I had a bike and my cousins taught me how to ride it.

Use of a pronoun (it) is clearer and avoids repeating 'bike'. This is not strictly a tense error but improves naturalness; keep past tense 'had' and 'taught' to match 'When I was a child'. Suggestion: replace the repeated noun with a pronoun to make the sentence smoother.

× But then, now, but I but now I don't know how to.

✓ However, now I don't know how to ride a bike.

The original contains repeated conjunctions and fragments ('but then, now, but I but now') creating an unclear sentence structure and missing the verb phrase 'ride a bike'. Use a single appropriate transition ('However' or 'But') and include the full verb phrase to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: simplify transitions and ensure the main verb phrase follows the subject.

× I have forgotten.

✓ I have forgotten how to ride a bike.

The sentence 'I have forgotten' is grammatically correct but is incomplete in context. Add the object 'how to ride a bike' to clarify what was forgotten. Present perfect 'have forgotten' correctly indicates a past action with present relevance.

× I don't know how to ride a bike now.

✓ I don't know how to ride a bike now.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses present simple correctly to state a current inability. No change needed.

× Uh, bikes were not actually very popular, but now, uh, new street were built and it has like a bike lane.

✓ Bikes were not actually very popular, but now new streets have been built and they have bike lanes.

Original has subject-verb number agreement errors and incorrect passive/use of tense. 'New street were built' is incorrect: 'streets' should be plural and the passive 'were built' lacks connection to present. Using present perfect passive 'have been built' shows change up to now. Also 'it has like a bike lane' mismatches singular/plural; use 'they have bike lanes' or 'and there are bike lanes'. Suggestion: ensure noun plurality matches verbs and choose correct tense to show recent changes.

× So I think it's kind of getting a lot popular right now, but still like the, the lanes are not being used honestly, but the government is, uh, encouraging the use of a bike.

✓ So I think it's becoming much more popular right now, but the lanes are still not being used much; however, the government is encouraging bicycle use.

'Getting a lot popular' is unidiomatic; use 'becoming much more popular' or 'getting more popular'. 'Not being used honestly' uses 'honestly' incorrectly; use 'not being used much' or 'not widely used'. 'The use of a bike' is slightly awkward; 'bicycle use' or 'using bicycles' is more natural. Suggestion: use common collocations ('becoming popular', 'not used much') and avoid filler words like 'honestly' in formal statements.