Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, clarity and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid repetition and filler words, correct word choice (e.g., "bike" vs "buy"), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: Yes, I did. I had a blue bicycle that my grandparents bought for me when I was about ten. It was faster than I expected, and I remember riding it down the short hill near our house for around 10 to 20 meters at a time. I enjoyed it because it gave me independence and a lot of fun.

제안: Give a clear opinion sentence and then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid grammar errors (subject-verb agreement) and repetition, and finish your thought completely. Use vocabulary like "convenient," "affordable," "efficient," and "unsafe" appropriately. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They are convenient and cheap, and they allow people to move around cities quickly during rush hour. However, they can be unsafe on busy roads because cyclists are more exposed to traffic, so many people wear helmets and use bike lanes when possible.

× I do. I do have a buy when I was a child, uh, I got a, a blue bike.

✓ I did. I did have a bike when I was a child; I got a blue bike.

The student used 'do' in present form with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past auxiliary 'did' for emphasis in past statements and correct 'buy' to 'bike' (spelling). Also combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'did' when emphasizing past events (I did have) and check spelling of common nouns.

× My grandparent got it for me.

✓ My grandparents got it for me.

The student used singular 'grandparent' but likely meant both or more commonly plural 'grandparents'. If only one, specify 'My grandparent' is acceptable but normally family members are plural. Also watch subject-verb agreement when changing number. Suggestion: Use plural when referring to both grandparents; use 'grandparent' with determiners if singular and specify which one.

× I was about like uh like 10 or 11 years old.

✓ I was about 10 or 11 years old.

Redundant filler words 'like uh like' are unnecessary. The tense 'was' is correct for past age; simplify phrasing for clarity. Suggestion: Remove fillers and extra 'like' to make the sentence concise.

× It was, it was pretty fast than I expected uh, it went like uh few like 10 or 20 meters.

✓ It was much faster than I expected; it could go about 10 or 20 meters quickly.

Comparative structure requires 'faster than' not 'fast than'. Also 'few like 10 or 20 meters' is unclear; use 'about' or 'approximately' and correct verb phrase for ability 'could go' or 'went'. Suggestion: Use the comparative form of adjectives (fast -> faster) and choose clear quantifiers ('about 10 or 20 meters').

× It is really popular.

✓ They are really popular.

The question asks about 'bikes' (plural). The student used singular 'it' which mismatches the plural subject. Use plural pronoun 'they' or repeat 'bikes' for clarity. Suggestion: Align pronouns with the noun number: bikes -> they.

× Another reason why it is because it is very convenient and it moves around the city pretty quickly but the cons is that you because it's you're more you're more likely in danger it will

✓ Another reason is that they are very convenient and can move around the city quickly, but a con is that you are more likely to be in danger when you do.

Multiple pronoun and structure errors: 'Another reason why it is because' is redundant; use 'Another reason is that'. 'It' should be 'they' for bikes. 'It moves around the city' should be 'they can move'. 'the cons is' should be 'a con is'. 'you because it's you're more you're more likely in danger it will' is ungrammatical and repetitive. Rephrase to 'you are more likely to be in danger when you do' or 'you are more likely to be in danger riding them.' Suggestion: Simplify sentence structure, match pronouns to nouns (bikes -> they), use modal 'can' for ability, and use 'likely to be' + past participle for risk expressions.