Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two supporting details. Use correct tense (past), articles, and simpler sentence structures. Organize ideas with linking words like 'because' or 'so' and avoid vague phrases. For example, say you did or did not have a bike, explain reason briefly, and mention any related memory or consequence.

예시: No, I didn't have a bicycle when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. However, my father taught me how to ride on a friend’s bike when I was eight, so I learned the basic skills before I owned my own.

제안: Clarify your opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Begin with a direct statement (Yes/No), then give two clear reasons connected with linking words like 'because' or 'however'. Use relevant vocabulary (commute, traffic, cycling infrastructure, health) and avoid unclear words. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because many people prefer motorbikes and cars for commuting due to poor cycling lanes. As a result, cycling is more common in parks or for leisure rather than daily travel.

× When I was a childhood, I don't have a bicycle because I ignore when it was practice skills My father is both the treat me in the bicycle.

✓ When I was a child, I did not have a bicycle because I did not know how to use one; my father treated me with kindness when I rode his bicycle.

Problems identified: article/noun error ('a childhood' should be 'a child' or 'childhood' as a noun phrase), tense inconsistency (mix of past and present: 'don't have' with 'When I was...'), incorrect verb choice ('ignore' used incorrectly), sentence structure/run-on sentence, and incorrect phrasing ('is both the treat me'). Correction choices: use past simple consistently ('did not have', 'did not know'), use correct noun phrase ('When I was a child'), replace 'ignore' with 'did not know' or 'had not learned', and split into two clauses connected with a semicolon or conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: keep past tense for childhood statements, use correct noun forms, and simplify clauses into clear subject-verb-object structures.

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✓ No, not really. I don't think bicycles are very popular in general where I live because people prefer other transportation, and fewer people learn to ride as they get older.

Problems identified: sentence contains many unclear word choices and fragments ('bariscore', 'get further', 'ever starting cuff to fatter in the fatter day is'), incorrect verb forms and agreement. Correction: provide a clear, grammatically correct response in present simple for a general statement ('I don't think bicycles are very popular'), use plural agreement for 'bicycles' and present simple 'are', and explain reasons with clear clauses ('people prefer other transportation', 'fewer people learn to ride'). Suggestion: when answering general questions use present simple, choose correct vocabulary (bicycle/bicycles, popular), keep sentences concise, and avoid invented or unclear words.