Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid unnecessary personal or sensitive information unless it's relevant; if you mention family actions, explain briefly why. Use linking words like "but" or "so" correctly and correct article and verb forms ("a bike", "sold it", "supported him").

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, my father sold it because he needed money at the time, and my mother agreed to help him. As a result, I didn’t have a bike for a few years.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words and correct grammar. Avoid repetition ("because because") and use precise phrases ("traffic jams", "get to work on time"). Keep it within 2–4 sentences and vary vocabulary ("popular", "common", "convenient").

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. They are convenient in large cities because traffic jams make cars slow, so many people use bikes to get to work on time. Also, cycling is often cheaper than driving or taking public transport.

× Yeah, I had bike when I was a child, but my father sold for alcohol and my mother also supported him because he also wanted some money.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child, but my father sold it to buy alcohol and my mother supported him because he wanted some money.

Errors: missing article before 'bike' (use 'a bike') and missing object after 'sold' — English requires 'sell something' or 'sell it' and the purpose should be expressed with 'to buy alcohol'. Also redundant 'also' and repeated 'also' removed for clarity. Suggestion: include appropriate articles ('a'/'the') before singular countable nouns, include the direct object or pronoun after 'sold', and use 'to buy' to express purpose. Use one 'also' only if needed.

× Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because because due to traffic jam we cannot reach our destination on time so it helps us to reach to our destination and also not get scolded by office.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because, due to traffic jams, we cannot reach our destinations on time, so bikes help us arrive and avoid being scolded at work.

Errors: redundant 'because because' removed; 'due to traffic jam' needs plural 'traffic jams' or 'a traffic jam' and commas for clarity; 'reach to our destination' is incorrect — use 'reach our destination' or 'arrive'; 'not get scolded by office' is unidiomatic — use 'avoid being scolded at work' or 'by our office'. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use plural or include an article with 'traffic jam', drop unnecessary 'to' after 'reach', and use idiomatic phrasing for being scolded ('at work' or 'by my boss').