Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence about owning a bike, correct noun choices, verb forms and word order, and reduce redundancy. Use linking words for one or two supporting details (e.g., why you liked it or how you used it). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle with training wheels on the back to help me balance. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon, and it made me feel independent and confident.

제안: Correct subject-verb agreement and improve organization. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words (for example, "because", "for example", "also"). Avoid filler words and keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in Indonesia because many people join group rides and cycling events on weekends. For example, there are community fun rides and sport cycling competitions that attract people of all ages.

× I had a bag with the red color.

✓ I had a bag with a red color.

The definite article 'the' incorrectly specifies 'red color' as a particular known color. Use the indefinite article 'a' to describe one among many colors. Alternatively, say 'a red bag' which is more natural; e.g., 'I had a red bag.'

× It's equipped with small 2 wheel chair on a back.

✓ It was equipped with small two wheels at the back.

Several pluralization and word-order errors: 'wheel' must be plural 'wheels' because there are two; use words for numbers ('two') in formal writing; 'on a back' is incorrect—use 'at the back' or 'on the back'. Also the subject is a past context, so use 'was equipped' rather than 'it's equipped'. Consider: 'It was equipped with two small wheels at the back.'

× It's helps me to balance where while I well.

✓ It helped me to balance while I was learning to ride.

Multiple issues: 'It's helps' mixes present contraction with third-person verb; use past tense 'helped' to match past context. 'To balance where while I well' is ungrammatical—likely intended meaning is balancing while learning or when I was a child. Use 'while I was learning to ride' or 'when I was young.' Also remove unnecessary 'to' before infinitive if structure changes (e.g., 'helped me balance').

× Yes, I think bikes is popular in Indonesia because every weekend or every umm there's several occasion in my country that like a fun riding bike or MMM.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in Indonesia because every weekend or on several occasions there are events like fun rides or sports activities.

Subject-verb agreement: 'bikes is' is incorrect; plural 'bikes' requires 'are'. 'There's several occasion' incorrectly uses singular 'there's' with plural 'occasions'; use 'there are'. Word choice and order improved: 'like a fun riding bike' -> 'events like fun rides'. Ensure tense and plurality agree.

× Or a sport activities.

✓ Or sports activities.

Inconsistent article and number: 'a sport activities' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'activities'. Remove 'a' and pluralize 'sport' to 'sports' to form the correct noun phrase 'sports activities.'

× They always use bike.

✓ They always use bikes.

Number agreement: 'bike' singular with generic plural meaning requires plural 'bikes'. Alternatively, use 'a bike' if referring to individuals: 'They always use a bike.' Using 'bikes' is more natural when speaking about people in general.