Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, tense and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct verb forms and word order. Keep it concise (1–3 sentences) and natural. For example, say “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.” and add a brief detail about the bike (color, how you used it).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue bicycle that I used to ride to my friend’s house every afternoon.

제안: Make your opinion clear, use linking words, and give a specific reason or example. Avoid filler words and repetition. Begin with a topic sentence (Present simple), then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words such as “because” or “for example.” Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, most of my school friends had bicycles when we were kids and many adults ride bikes in parks on weekends.

× Yes, I have the bike when I where is the child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' and the incorrect word order 'where is the child' instead of past tense. The question asked about the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so use past simple 'had' and correct pronoun and verb order 'I was a child'. Suggestion: use past simple for past situations and the standard subject-verb order (subject + was).

× Yes, I think so, 'cause, uh, my friends, ever, my friends had a bike and uh, everyone was childhood, uh.

✓ Yes, I think so, because my friends all had bikes when they were children.

This sentence has multiple structure problems: informal filler words and repeated phrases ('ever, my friends'), incorrect noun forms ('a bike' vs plural 'bikes' for 'my friends'), and wrong phrase 'everyone was childhood'. The intended meaning is that many friends had bikes during childhood, so use 'my friends all had bikes' and 'when they were children'. Suggestion: remove fillers, keep consistent number (plural for multiple people), and use 'when they were children' to indicate time in the past.