Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct tense and grammar (use past simple consistently), avoid redundancy (e.g., 'in fact' and 'to spend a lovely time together' are repetitive). Use a linking word if adding detail.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that I rode with my friends during school holidays. For example, we would cycle to the park most afternoons and have races, which made the summer really fun.

제안: Give a clear direct opinion first and support it with specific, coherent reasons. Avoid filler words (umm) and grammatical mistakes. Use linking words (however, although, because) and precise vocabulary (teenagers, children, adults, cars, public transport). Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Because we are fairly developed, most adults prefer cars or public transport, whereas bicycles are mainly used by teenagers and children for short trips.

× In fact, I usually play with it with my friends in the vacations to spend a lovely time together.

✓ In fact, I usually played with it with my friends during the vacations to spend a lovely time together.

The context is past time ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Usually play' is present habitual; change to 'usually played'. Also use 'during the vacations' rather than 'in the vacations' for natural preposition use.

× I don't think so that bikes are popular in my country because it is a some sort of umm developed country so not all people are using it.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because it is a somewhat developed country, so not everyone uses them.

Remove unnecessary 'so that' after 'don't think'. 'A some sort of umm developed' is ungrammatical; use 'somewhat developed' or 'a sort of developed'. 'Not all people are using it' has pronoun and tense errors: 'not everyone uses them' matches plural 'bikes' and simple present for general statement.

× Most of it are.

✓ Most of them are.

'It' refers to singular; since referring to 'people' or 'bikes' use plural pronoun 'them'. Also ensure agreement: 'Most of them are' (followed by complement) is correct.

× Most of them are like teenagers or child but the majority are like adults are using umm vehicles like umm cars and umm public.

✓ Most of them are teenagers or children, but the majority are adults who use vehicles such as cars or public transport.

Use plural 'children' not 'child'. Avoid filler 'are like' and restructure: 'the majority are adults who use vehicles' is clearer. 'Public' alone is incomplete; use 'public transport'. Also correct relative clause 'who use' instead of awkward 'are using' for habitual action.