Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve fluency and structure: give a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and correct grammar. Use past tense consistently and avoid vague pronouns (say “a bicycle” rather than “it”). Add a brief comment about how you used it (frequency, purpose, or a memory) and use a linking word if adding detail.

예시: Yes — I had a small black bicycle when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood, usually after school, because it was my main way to visit friends. It was slightly too big for me at first, but I learned to balance quickly and felt very proud when I could ride without training wheels.

제안: Work on grammar, clarity and specificity: start with a clear opinion, use correct noun phrases and articles (“every child” not “everyone child”), and give specific reasons or examples why bikes are popular. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas and avoid overgeneralization.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many schoolchildren ride bikes to school, and adults use them for shopping or exercise, especially in smaller towns where traffic is light.

× Yes, I used to have it and its color is black.

✓ Yes, I used to have one and its color was black.

The student said 'used to have it' which is odd because the examiner asked about having a bike in childhood; 'it' implies a previously mentioned specific bike but 'one' is more natural. More importantly, tense consistency is required: 'used to have' indicates a past habitual state, so the description of the bike's color should also be in the past tense ('was') rather than present ('is'). Change 'it' to 'one' and 'is' to 'was' to maintain correct past reference and natural phrasing.

× Yes, in my country everyone child dreams is have a bicycle.

✓ Yes, in my country every child dreams of having a bicycle.

This sentence has multiple structure errors that match the 'Sentence structure errors' category. 'Everyone child' is incorrect; the correct form is 'every child'. The verb phrase 'dreams is have' is ungrammatical. Use the verb 'dream' with the preposition 'of' plus a gerund: 'dreams of having'. Also 'everyone' vs 'every' distinction: 'every child' is singular and takes 'dreams'. The corrected sentence uses proper determiner, verb pattern, preposition and gerund to convey the intended meaning.