Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct but too short and filled with hesitation. Add a brief topic sentence plus one or two supporting details (where you used it, who you rode with, or a memory) and remove filler words. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and use linking words if adding detail.

예시: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike around the neighborhood almost every day after school, usually with my younger sister, and it was how I learned to be independent.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has many hesitations and some vague phrasing. Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and a short example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid repeating 'uh'. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many children aged 9 to 15 own one and use them for short trips to school or the market. For example, in my town most families buy inexpensive bikes, so cycling is an affordable way to get around.

× most of the kids, uh, from age 9 to 15 can have a bike and, uh, go wherever you want.

✓ Most kids from ages 9 to 15 can have a bike and go wherever they want.

The original sentence mixes second person 'you' with a generic subject 'most of the kids' and omits correct subject-verb agreement and pronoun consistency. Use third person plural pronoun 'they' to match 'most kids' and remove extraneous commas and filler words. Also use 'ages 9 to 15' or 'from age 9 to 15' without 'the' for natural phrasing.

× it's uh, very cheap to buy.

✓ They are usually very cheap to buy.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring back to 'bikes' (plural); use 'they' to match plural. Adding 'usually' improves naturalness. Ensure pronoun number agreement and clear reference to the noun.