Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two concise supporting details with correct tense and vocabulary. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and short, unclear clauses. Correct grammar: use past tense for childhood events (I didn't have a bike) and present perfect/simple correctly (I got a bike at 21). Keep answers under five sentences and use linking words (however, but, so) to make the response coherent.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I only learned to cycle much later and I got my first bike when I was 21. At first I felt a bit embarrassed because I was older than most beginners, but practicing regularly helped me become confident.

제안: Answer directly, then support with a specific reason and an example. Reduce hesitation and use accurate subject-verb agreement (Bikes are popular). Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and provide a clear observation or statistic if possible. Keep sentences concise and varied vocabulary (shared bikes, cycling infrastructure, commuters).

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips. For example, there are thousands of dockless sharing bikes on the streets of my city, and many commuters use bike lanes to get to work quickly.

× Umm, when I was a child I did not have a bike, so I can say that I've umm, take a bike when I was 21.

✓ Umm, when I was a child I did not have a bike, so I can say that I got a bike when I was 21.

The phrase 'I've take a bike' mixes present perfect auxiliary 'have' with the base form 'take', which is incorrect. The intended meaning is a past event at a specific time ('when I was 21'), so the simple past 'got' is appropriate. Suggestion: use simple past for completed actions at a specific time (I got, I bought, I took).

× It it is quite embarrassing thing, but now I write well.

✓ It was quite an embarrassing thing, but now I write well.

The original has repetition 'It it' and uses present 'is' though referring to a past event, so tense and articles are incorrect. Also 'embarrassing thing' needs the indefinite article 'an'. Use past tense 'was' for a past experience and include the article: 'It was quite an embarrassing thing.'

× Umm, yes it is because umm, I can know that through the road.

✓ Umm, yes, it is, because I can tell from the road.

The phrase 'I can know' is unnatural in English; 'know' is stative and not normally used with 'can' in this context. 'Tell from' or 'see from' fits better. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I can tell from the road' or 'I can see from the road.'

× So you can umm, see there's a lot of umm, sharing bikes in our town, which means that it is very popular in our country.

✓ So you can see there are a lot of shared bikes in our town, which means that they are very popular in our country.

'There's a lot of sharing bikes' mixes contraction 'there's' (there is) with plural 'bikes' causing agreement problems; use 'there are'. 'Sharing bikes' is better expressed as 'shared bikes' or 'bike-sharing bikes'. Also 'which means that it is very popular' uses 'it' ambiguously; refer to plural 'they' or 'bike-sharing' (singular). Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and match pronoun number to the referent.