Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, but you can improve by using a stronger topic sentence, adding one specific detail (e.g. where or with whom you rode it), and using a linking word to connect ideas. Also avoid repeating ‘it’ too often by using synonyms. Keep it within 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes — I had a pink bicycle that my parents gave me when I was about seven. I used to ride it around the neighbourhood with my friends every afternoon, which is how I learned to be confident on the road. Because it was lightweight and had a basket, I could carry my schoolbooks and snacks easily.

제안: Good personal observation and example, but make your topic sentence clearer and more general before giving the personal example. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'in addition', and choose more precise vocabulary (e.g. 'take up cycling' rather than 'involve themselves into'). Try to make two concise sentences: a general statement and a supporting example.

예시: Yes, cycling is quite popular in my country — many people take up cycling for fitness and leisure. For example, my father rides his bike every Sunday, and there are regular weekend cycling groups in our city.

× I've observed that a lot of people from my country involve themselves into cycling as a hobby

✓ I've observed that a lot of people from my country involve themselves in cycling as a hobby

The correct preposition with 'involve oneself' is 'in' not 'into'. This is a combination of verb + preposition usage; classify under 'Verb + -ing form' because the verb phrase requires the correct preposition before the gerund 'cycling'. Suggestion: use 'involve themselves in' or rephrase to 'take up cycling' to be more natural.

× It was a gift for me from my parents

✓ It was a gift to me from my parents

The usual English collocation is 'a gift to someone' rather than 'a gift for someone' when indicating the recipient. Both are sometimes used, but 'gift to me' is more natural here. Suggestion: use 'a gift to me' or simply 'a gift from my parents'.

× it was pink and I enjoyed riding it almost every day

✓ It was pink, and I enjoyed riding it almost every day

The original sentence is a run-on with missing capitalization and punctuation. Begin with a capital letter and join the clauses with a comma and coordinating conjunction 'and' to form a correct compound sentence. Suggestion: ensure sentence-initial capitalization and proper punctuation between independent clauses.

× a lot of people from my country involve themselves into cycling as a hobby

✓ a lot of people in my country take up cycling as a hobby

Besides the preposition error ('involve themselves into' should be 'involve themselves in'), the phrase 'people from my country' is less natural than 'people in my country'. Also 'involve themselves in cycling' is wordy; 'take up cycling' is a more natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'people in my country take up cycling' for clarity and naturalness.