Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense errors (e.g. "helped" instead of "helps") and avoid trailing or incomplete sentences. Limit to up to five sentences and remove filler words like "uh".

예시: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike with friends around the block every afternoon, which helped me become more physically fit. In addition, cycling taught me balance and confidence, and it was a fun way to explore my neighborhood.

제안: Make the answer more natural and specific. Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with two concrete reasons and a brief example. Use correct verb forms (e.g. "are" or "use"), avoid fillers like "umm," and include linking words such as "because," "for example," or "also."

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular. Many people use bicycles as a cheap and convenient way to commute to work, and others ride for leisure or exercise. For example, in cities you can see cycle lanes and many commuters riding to the train station each morning.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride with my friends around the block and every afternoon it helps me become, uh, physically fit and I use that skills to remember the.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride with my friends around the block, and every afternoon it helped me become physically fit; I used those skills to remember things.

Multiple issues: 6 (Present tense issue) and 5 (Past tense issue) and 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs) and 1 (Singular and plural issue). Rationale: The student begins in past tense ('had', 'used to ride'), so subsequent verbs should also be past tense. 'helps' is present tense and should be 'helped'. 'I use that skills' mixes present tense and incorrect number; 'use' should be past 'used' and 'that skills' should be plural agreement 'those skills'. The phrase 'to remember the' is incomplete; add an object like 'things'. Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense for past habits, ensure subject-verb agreement and correct demonstrative adjective ('those skills'), and complete the sentence with a clear object.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because most of the users of bike were commuters and also those who are using it for fun and for umm, exercise.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because most of the users of bikes are commuters, and others use them for fun and exercise.

Incorrect use of quantifiers and number (14) and 1 (Singular and plural issue) and 6 (Present tense issue) and 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions). Rationale: 'users of bike' should be 'users of bikes' or simply 'users of bikes are commuters'. The sentence mixes past 'were' with general present 'are popular'; use present tense 'are' for general truths. 'those who are using it' is wordy and uses singular 'it' for plural 'bikes'; better: 'others use them'. Remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns to match meaning, keep present tense for general statements, and simplify phrasing for clarity.