Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'buy a get a bike') and simplify phrases like 'financially my family couldn't afford' to 'my family couldn't afford one.'

예시: No, I didn't. I wanted a bike, but my family couldn't afford one at the time. As a result, I learned to enjoy walking and using public transport instead.

제안: Provide a direct opinion sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words and correct grammar. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'infrastructure' instead of 'bike road and such things') and avoid repetition. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Not very. Although some people cycle, bicycle use is limited because the infrastructure is poor. For example, there are few dedicated bike lanes and traffic can be unsafe for cyclists.

× No, actually I really wanted to buy a get a bike, but financially my family couldn't afford the bike.

✓ No, actually I really wanted to get a bike, but financially my family couldn't afford one.

The sentence contains an extra verb phrase 'buy a get a bike' which is redundant and incorrect; use either 'buy a bike' or 'get a bike.' Also, 'the bike' implies a specific bicycle previously mentioned; use the indefinite pronoun 'one' for a general bike. Suggestion: choose a single verb ('get' or 'buy') and use 'one' when referring to a non-specific item. Ensure verbs are not duplicated and articles/pronouns match specificity.

× I think not really much 'cause in our country the bike road and such things doesn't doesn't standardize it.

✓ I don't think they are very popular, because in our country bike lanes and similar infrastructure are not standardized.

Multiple issues: 'I think not really much' is an awkward negation; use 'I don't think they are very popular.' 'Cause' should be replaced with 'because' in formal speech. 'The bike road and such things' is ungrammatical and vague; use 'bike lanes and similar infrastructure.' The verb 'doesn't doesn't standardize it' is incorrect: 'doesn't standardize' is wrong because infrastructure is not the subject doing standardization; instead use passive or 'are not standardized.' Also plural noun 'bike lanes' requires plural verb 'are.' Suggestion: restructure the sentence to a clear negative opinion, use correct nouns for infrastructure, and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct voice (passive) where appropriate.