Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap net değil, gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeleri var. Konuya doğrudan yanıt verip kısa bir açıklama eklemelisin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak nedenini belirt ve örnek ver. Örneğin: 1) “No, I didn’t.” ile başlayıp 2) kısa bir neden ve 3) günümüzde durumun nasıl olduğuna dair bir cümle ekle. Toplam 2-4 cümleyi geçmemeye dikkat et. Ayrıca dolgu kelimelerini (uh, umm) azalt.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family preferred to buy books and art supplies. For example, I spent most afternoons drawing and painting, which helped me develop artistic skills. Now I sometimes ride a bike for exercise, but it was never part of my childhood.

제안: Cevap belirsiz ve dilbilgisi hataları var; fikir tam ifade edilmemiş. Önce net bir görüş belirt (evet/ hayır/ kısmen), sonra bağlaç kullanarak sebepler ver (örneğin “because” veya “however”) ve somut örnek/sonuç ekle. Cümleleri daha kısa ve akıcı kıl, gereksiz tekrarları çıkar.

예시: Bikes are becoming more popular in my country, but they are still less common than in many European countries. This is mainly because cities are investing in bike lanes and the government offers subsidies for electric bikes, which encourages more people to cycle. As a result, I see more commuters using bikes during rush hour.

× Conversely, no uh, therefore I liked more artistic, umm, products or artistic activities.

✓ No, I didn't. Instead, I preferred artistic products and activities.

The original sentence has unclear conjunctions and word order problems. Use 'No, I didn't' to answer the question about having a bike. Replace 'Conversely' and 'therefore' with 'Instead' to show contrast. Change 'I liked more artistic products or artistic activities' to 'I preferred artistic products and activities' for correct verb choice and parallel structure. Suggestion: Keep answers concise and use simple connectors like 'instead' or 'but' and a clear past-tense verb for preference ('preferred').

× Uh, nowadays I, I'm more supportive than my childhood, umm.

✓ Nowadays I am more cultured/creative than I was in my childhood.

The original mixes present tense with an incorrect comparative construction. 'My childhood' cannot be directly compared with 'I' without 'I was'. Use 'I am more X than I was in my childhood' or 'than I was as a child'. Also 'supportive' is semantically odd here; choose a clearer adjective like 'creative' or 'artistic'. Suggestion: Compare a current state to a past state using 'than I was' and choose an adjective that fits context.

× Not as much as in Europe, but uh, with, umm, which new policies in economics and the government, uh, bikes.

✓ Not as much as in Europe, but with new economic and government policies, bicycles are becoming more common.

Original sentence is fragmented and has incorrect word order ('which new policies'). Combine clauses and use a clear subject 'bicycles' and verb 'are becoming'. Use 'with new economic and government policies' to express cause. Suggestion: Form complete sentences with subject and verb and place modifying phrases next to the words they modify.

× More bikes are more likely to impress people than before.

✓ There are more bikes now, and they are more visible to people than before.

Sentence is awkwardly repetitive ('More bikes are more likely...'). Clarify meaning: either state quantity increase or visibility/impact. Use 'There are more bikes now' to show increase, and 'they are more visible' or 'more popular' for effect. Suggestion: Avoid repeating comparative words; state the specific change (quantity, popularity, visibility).

× Umm, I commit.

✓ I agree.

'I commit' is unnatural in this context when expressing agreement. Use 'I agree' to show assent. Suggestion: Use common discourse phrases like 'I agree' or 'I think so' when responding in conversation.