Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “and,” “so,” “because”). Also correct tense and pronoun errors (e.g., say “I had a bike” or “I used to have a bike,” not “we I”).

예시: I used to have a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my siblings in our backyard, which was great exercise and lots of fun. Because we enjoyed it so much, I still like casual cycling now.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitations and finish your sentence. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “affordable,” “practical,” “urban areas”).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to maintain. In many cities, cycling is practical for short trips and commuters prefer it to avoid traffic. Additionally, some people choose bikes for exercise and environmental reasons.

× Yes, we I used to have a bike.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike.

The sentence contains a redundant pronoun 'we' before 'I', creating an incorrect sentence structure and subject confusion. Remove 'we' so the subject is singular 'I', which matches 'used to'. Suggestion: decide whether you mean 'I' or 'we' and keep only that subject.

× I used to do biking with my siblings and our backyard and yeah, it was a very fun time and I love biking.

✓ I used to go biking with my siblings in our backyard, and it was a very fun time; I loved biking.

'Do biking' is unnatural in English; the correct collocation is 'go biking' or 'ride a bike'. Also the phrase 'and our backyard' is incorrectly connected; use 'in our backyard'. Tense inconsistency: 'used to' and past context should pair with past 'loved' rather than present 'love'. Suggestions: use 'go biking' and keep past tense for past habits, and connect clauses with appropriate preposition 'in'.

× Yeah, it's quite popular in my country because it is something so cheap to buy and also in my country, umm, people can afford umm like cars or motorcycles.

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are cheap to buy, and some people cannot afford cars or motorcycles.

Sentence has awkward phrasing and contradictions. 'It's' is vague; specify 'bicycles'. 'Something so cheap' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'they are cheap'. The original 'people can afford like cars' contradicts the intended meaning; likely meant 'cannot afford'. Also avoid repeating 'in my country'. Suggestion: state the subject clearly, use 'they are' for plural, and ensure the logic matches (affordability leads to popularity).

× So it's like the best option for them but uh also it's.

✓ So they are the best option for many people, especially those on a tight budget.

The original sentence is incomplete ('also it's.') and vague ('it's like'). Replace with a complete sentence specifying what 'they' refers to (bicycles) and give a clear reason. Suggestion: avoid filler words and finish the thought with a clear clause.