Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Remove filler words (e.g., “like”) and fix tense/grammar (e.g., “four-wheel” not “four wheels ones”). Use a linking word to connect reason. Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small four-wheel training bike when I was a child because I was still learning to balance. For practice, I used that bike around my neighborhood until I gained confidence.

제안: Provide a clear opinion first, then give 2 specific reasons with linking words. Use correct phrasing (e.g., “popular for commuting” not “popular for go to work”), and avoid contradictory wording like “I don't think... It should be popular.” Be specific about examples (commuting, exercise) and use cohesive devices such as “however” or “because”.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular for commuting in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes or cars; however, bikes are common for short trips and exercise because they are cheap and good for health.

× Yes, I had a bike but a very small one because and it had like four wheels because I actually didn't know how to use a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike, but it was very small and had four wheels because I actually didn't know how to ride a bike when I was a child.

Multiple issues: incorrect connector 'because and', awkward phrasing 'it had like four wheels', and wrong verb 'use' for riding a bike. Use 'but' to join clauses, remove filler 'like', and use 'ride' for bicycles. Keep past tense consistent (had, was, didn't know). Suggestion: combine clauses clearly and use appropriate verb collocations.

× So for practising, I had four wheel ones.

✓ So for practice, I had a four-wheeled one.

Word choice and form: 'practising' is British present-participle but here a noun 'practice' fits better; 'four wheel ones' should be adjective form 'four-wheeled' modifying 'one'. Maintain past tense 'had'. Suggestion: use 'practice' as noun and hyphenate compound adjective 'four-wheeled'.

× I don't think that it's very popular for go to work or go somewhere else.

✓ I don't think it is very popular to use bikes to go to work or to go elsewhere.

Incorrect infinitive structure 'for go' should be 'to use' or 'to go'; 'somewhere else' better as 'elsewhere'. Also 'it's' unclear—use explicit 'it is' referring to using bikes. Suggestion: use correct infinitive forms and clearer phrasing.

× It should be popular among us because it's very helpful to get us work and it's very healthy activity.

✓ They should be popular here because they are very helpful for getting us to work and they are a very healthy activity.

Pronoun and reference errors: 'It' unclear—bikes are plural so use 'they'. 'Get us work' is incorrect; use 'getting us to work'. Include articles: 'a very healthy activity' or better 'a very healthy form of exercise'. Ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subject. Suggestion: match pronouns to noun number and use correct verb patterns like 'helpful for doing' or 'helpful in getting'.