Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and relevance. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and vocabulary, and avoid irrelevant or incorrect words. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words to sequence events (e.g., "then", "but", "after that"). Provide specific details (what kind of bike, who you rode with, when it broke, and what happened after).

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a small red single-speed bike that I rode with my friends every day after school. We often rode to the park and practiced riding tricks on the sidewalks. After a few years the chain broke and my parents couldn’t afford repairs, so I stopped using it.

제안: Make the response more natural and complete. Start with a clear statement, then give 2–3 specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "also"). Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, word choice) and finish the sentence with a conclusion or example. Avoid vague phrases like "some people" without support.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. This is because they are an affordable way to travel, and many people use them to exercise as well. For example, in my neighborhood nearly every household owns at least one bike for commuting or leisure, so you often see families cycling together on weekends.

× It's a late bike and I use it to play with my friend every day after the school and it was broken so I didn't write it anymore.

✓ It was an old bike and I used it to play with my friends every day after school, but it broke so I didn't ride it anymore.

Mixed tenses and wrong word choices: the student is talking about a past situation, so past tense verbs should be used (was, used, played, broke, didn't ride). 'Late' is incorrect for describing an old object; use 'old'. 'I use' should be 'I used'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if referring generally. 'After the school' should be 'after school'. 'It was broken' is passive and unnatural here; use active 'it broke'. 'Write' is a misspelling of 'ride'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense and choose correct vocabulary (old, ride) and natural phrasing (after school).

× Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because some people like to do an exercise and bicycle is their first choice because every household at least have one bike so they can

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country because some people like to exercise and bicycles are their first choice because every household has at least one bike so they can...

Tense and agreement problems: use the base verb 'exercise' (not 'do an exercise') for a general statement. 'Bicycle is' should be plural 'bicycles are' to match plural 'bikes' and general subject. Subject-verb agreement: 'every household' is singular, so use 'has' not 'have'. Also add 'at least' before 'one bike' in that order. Suggestion: use consistent present simple for general facts, plural nouns when referring generally, and correct subject-verb agreement with 'every'.