Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce minor grammar mistakes and redundancy, make the response more natural and concise, and add one specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain how you learned and how you felt, using linking words for coherence.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I learned to ride using my neighbors' bike. For example, I practised in their driveway every weekend, and although I enjoyed learning, I sometimes felt disappointed because my parents couldn't afford to buy one for me.

제안: Make the answer slightly more formal and provide one specific example or brief comparison to support your claim. Use linking words to connect points (e.g., however, because, for example). Avoid contractions like 'cause' to sound more natural in the exam.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Although athletes and hobby cyclists use them regularly, most people prefer cars because the cycling infrastructure is poor. For example, bike lanes are rare in the city, so riding can be dangerous in heavy traffic.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child by but my neighbors had one so I practiced riding with them.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my neighbors had one, so I practiced riding with them.

The sentence contains an extra word 'by' and lacks proper punctuation between clauses, causing a run-on. Remove the extraneous word 'by' and add commas to separate the clauses for clarity: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my neighbors had one, so I practiced riding with them.' This fixes sentence structure and improves readability.

× I don't really think that bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ I don't really think bikes are very popular in my country.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but contains an unnecessary conjunction 'that' which can be omitted for a more natural spoken style. Removing 'that' makes the sentence more concise while keeping present tense meaning intact.

× I know that some athletes and hobby cyclists use them regularly and daily, but most people prefer cars 'cause the city cycling infrastructure is really poor and traffic conditions make riding inconvenient.

✓ I know some athletes and hobby cyclists use them regularly, but most people prefer cars because the city's cycling infrastructure is really poor and traffic conditions make riding inconvenient.

The phrase 'regularly and daily' is redundant; choose one adverb ('regularly' or 'daily') to avoid repetition. Replace the informal ''cause' with 'because' and use the possessive form 'city's cycling infrastructure' for correctness. These changes remove redundancy, improve formality, and correct the noun phrase.