Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and directly responds to the question, but it contains hesitation and could be slightly expanded with one concise supporting detail. Aim to remove filler words (e.g., “uh”) and add a brief reason or a short memory to make the response more natural and engaging. Keep the response within 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if you add a second sentence (for example, “but” or “so”).

예시: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child, but I often rode my cousin’s bike on weekends. I remember practicing turns in the park until I felt confident.

제안: Your answer gives a clear opinion and some explanation, but it includes hesitation and could be phrased more naturally and politely. Avoid repeating filler words and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “many people” or “lower-income families” instead of “poor people”). Provide one specific example of how bikes are used to support your point and use a linking word such as “because” or “for example.”

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because many lower-income families cannot afford cars or motorbikes. For example, people often use bikes to commute to work, carry groceries, or deliver goods in towns.

× they cannot afford like cars or motorbikes, so they use bicycle to ride and to do their daily chores.

✓ they cannot afford cars or motorbikes, so they use bicycles to ride and to do their daily chores.

The noun 'bicycle' should be plural ('bicycles') to match the plural subject 'they' and general meaning (people in general). Also remove the filler 'like' before 'cars' because 'afford like cars' is ungrammatical; use 'afford cars or motorbikes'. Suggestion: say 'they cannot afford cars or motorbikes, so they use bicycles.'

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child. I used to ride, uh, my cousin's bike.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child. I used to ride my cousin's bike.

The original sentence contains hesitant fillers 'uh,' which are not grammatical errors but disrupt clarity. Removing the filler yields a cleaner sentence. Pronoun use is correct ('my cousin's bike'), so only clarity/editing is needed. Suggestion: avoid filler words in formal speech and say 'I used to ride my cousin's bike.'

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Uh, people, uh, actually poor people, they cannot afford like cars or motorbikes, so they use bicycle to ride and to do their daily chores.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Actually, poor people cannot afford cars or motorbikes, so they use bicycles to ride and do their daily chores.

The original has disfluent fillers and redundant pronoun 'they' after 'poor people', causing awkward structure. Remove fillers and the repeated subject to make one clear sentence: 'Poor people cannot afford cars... so they use bicycles.' Also remove 'to' before 'do' as parallel verbs 'ride and do' are sufficient. Suggestion: produce concise sentences without unnecessary fillers and avoid repeating subjects.