Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and verb mistakes (e.g., wrote -> rode, it -> omit).

예시: Yes. I had a bike as a child, and I rode it almost every day to practise. As a result, cycling became my usual way of getting around the neighbourhood, especially for short trips to school and the market.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and clear linking words. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., "10 years ago", "bikes", "choose to ride"). Keep to two or three succinct sentences.

예시: I think bikes used to be more popular, but their use has declined recently. Ten years ago many students and workers rode bikes for short commutes because they were cheap and convenient; however, the increase in car ownership has reduced cycling in cities.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child that I wrote it nearly every day to practice riding, so this became a common transportation when I go out since then.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it nearly every day to practice riding, so it became a common means of transportation whenever I went out after that.

Errors: incorrect verb 'wrote' used instead of past tense of 'ride' (should be 'rode'), inconsistent past tense 'go' with earlier past time ('went'), and awkward phrasing 'common transportation' (use 'means of transportation'). Correction keeps consistent past tense. Suggestion: use the correct past form 'rode' and keep past verbs consistent (rode, went). Use 'means of transportation' for natural collocation.

× Well that depends on the time period.

✓ Well, that depends on the time period.

Minor punctuation/flow: sentence is grammatically correct in present tense but needs a comma after 'Well' for natural speech. No tense change required. Suggestion: include comma for clarity when starting with 'Well'.

× I think when maybe 10 years old buys are very popular and maybe students and workers they chose to rise by ride a bike when going out, but now with the cars.

✓ I think about ten years ago bikes were very popular. Many students and workers chose to ride a bike when going out, but now, with more cars, fewer people do.

Multiple errors addressed: tense and time expression ('when maybe 10 years old' -> 'about ten years ago'), subject-verb order and plurality ('buys' incorrect -> 'bikes'), past tense 'chose' is correct but needed consistent structure, incorrect verb 'rise by ride' corrected to 'chose to ride', and sentence fragment 'but now with the cars' completed to show contrast. Suggestion: use clear time expressions ('ten years ago'), correct nouns ('bikes'), correct past verbs ('chose'), and complete comparative clauses ('but now, with more cars, fewer people do').