Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. Yes, I did.), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases (e.g. “fill down”) and use linking words (for example, but, because) to make the answer coherent. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that I rode almost every day in the neighborhood. However, I often fell off while trying to ride fast, so my mother always reminded me to be careful and learn from my mistakes.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a brief contrast or prediction. Reduce filler words and incorrect grammar (e.g. “the riding a bike going to be popular”). Use linking words such as because, but, and however to organize ideas. Keep it within three sentences if possible.

예시: No, I don't think bikes are very popular overall because most people prefer cars or the metro for longer distances. However, biking is becoming more common among young people, especially in cities where bike lanes and sharing programs are available.

× Yeah, actually I have a bike, but at the first of all I have to say that when I was a child, uh, I rode the bike very hard and the most of the time I felt that.

✓ Yeah, actually I had a bike, but first of all I have to say that when I was a child, I rode the bike a lot and most of the time I felt that way.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The student begins with 'I have a bike' (present) but then refers to childhood events, which should be in the past. Change 'have' to 'had' to match past context (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'At the first of all' is nonstandard; use 'first of all' instead. 'Rode the bike very hard' is awkward for frequency; use 'rode the bike a lot'. 'The most of the time I felt that' needs 'that way' to be grammatical and clear. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when speaking about childhood and use common phrases for emphasis and frequency.

× But as always, my mom told me something that, uh, you have to fill down to umm, learn some things new.

✓ But as always, my mom told me something like, 'You have to fall down to learn some new things.'

Problems include incorrect phrase 'fill down' and word order. The student likely meant 'fall down' (to fall off a bike) and 'learn some new things' is the correct word order and article use. Also reported speech should be quoted or rephrased; here we use a quoted direct instruction. This fits article and sentence structure corrections (Grammar Problem Type ID 22 and 26). Suggestion: use 'fall down' for physical falling and 'learn new things' for correct adjective order.

× Actually, I have to say that, uh, no, it's not very popular, uh, because in our country, uh, most of them, you want to go to another, umm, place, we use car or metro.

✓ Actually, I have to say that no, it's not very popular, because in our country, if you want to go somewhere else, we use cars or the metro.

Several grammar issues: 'most of them' is incorrect when referring to people in general; use 'if you' or 'people'. 'Go to another place' is awkward; use 'go somewhere else'. 'We use car' must be plural 'cars' when speaking generally (singular/plural issue, Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Also include definite article 'the metro' for the public transport system. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general habits and natural phrases like 'go somewhere else'.

× But nowadays the riding a bike going to be popular, but just from the young people.

✓ But nowadays riding bikes is becoming popular, but only among young people.

Original has wrong word order and verb forms. 'The riding a bike going to be popular' mixes articles and future forms incorrectly. Use 'riding bikes is becoming popular' (present progressive for changing trends) or 'is becoming popular' to express ongoing change (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). Also 'just from the young people' should be 'only among young people' for correct preposition and phrasing. Suggestion: use 'is becoming' for trends and 'among' when referring to a group.