Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one short detail using a linking word. For example, say how many bikes and one reason or memory. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had several bikes as a child — almost five in total. For example, I remember riding a bright red one around my neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me become more independent.

제안: Give a direct answer and support it with two specific reasons using linking words for coherence. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and articles) and avoid vague phrasing. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because the weather is often very hot and many cities are far apart. As a result, people prefer cars or public transport for comfort and speed.

× Yes, I had several bikes before.

✓ Yes, I had several bikes.

Redundant adverb 'before' is unnecessary because the past tense 'had' already indicates the action occurred in the past. Remove 'before' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I had several bikes' or 'I had several bikes when I was a child.'

× I had almost 5 bikes I had it before.

✓ I had almost five bikes before.

Two problems: 'almost 5 bikes I had it before' is run-on and contains an incorrect pronoun 'it' referring to plural 'bikes.' Also, use of numeral should be written in words in formal speech but not required. Corrected to a single clause: 'I had almost five bikes before.' If you want to specify timeframe, add 'when I was a child.'

× I had almost 5 bikes I had it before.

✓ I had almost five bikes before.

The original is a run-on with repeated subject and incorrect pronoun. Combine ideas into one coherent sentence and remove the unnecessary 'it.' Keep subject once: 'I had almost five bikes before.'

× I believe it's not because there we have a hot weather and the long distance between cities.

✓ I don't think so because we have hot weather and long distances between cities there.

Multiple issues: awkward negation 'I believe it's not' and unnatural word order. Also 'a hot weather' is incorrect article usage with uncountable noun. Rephrase to 'I don't think so because we have hot weather and long distances between cities there.' This fixes negation, article error, and word order. For clarity, place 'there' at end or say 'in my country.'

× I believe it's not because there we have a hot weather and the long distance between cities.

✓ I don't think so because we have hot weather and long distances between cities there.

Using 'a' before 'hot weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable; no article is needed. Also 'the long distance' suggests a specific distance; use plural 'long distances' to indicate general condition. Change 'I believe it's not' to 'I don't think so' for natural negation.